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Review #1, by AlexFan Reading The Picture

4th August 2013:
You have a way of letting your reader know whose point of view your story is being told from. You never mention the characters name but within a few sentences the reader has already figured out who you're talking about and you don't need to mention the characters name.

The only thing that I would point out is that you have huge paragraphs which make your story difficult to read. I would suggest cutting them in half so instead of having one paragraph you've got two.

I liked the tone of this though, Hermione sounds so tired, it's expected because she was after all tortured but you managed to get that feeling through. I'm not sure whether you wanted it to be that way but that's how it came across.

Anyway, this was really interesting!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I think I've learned to develop that style, because I tend to write that way for some reason. I'm glad you liked it. Her tiresomeness was intentional, and I'm glad that came across as well.

And, I wrote this a long time ago, so I'm completely surprised there isn't more wrong with it than that! I will fix up my mega paragraphs soon. Thank you so much for my review!

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Review #2, by camiegail Reading The Picture

21st June 2013:
I wasn't sure about this at first...I don't really ship Hermione and Draco... But wow!! I love it!!

Author's Response: Thank you! I tried not to make it too generic, and I'm glad you've found an appreciation.

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Review #3, by Sairahi Reading The Picture

19th August 2012:
Nice work. Fun imagery too!

Author's Response: Thank you, I hoped it would come across.

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