This is a very chaotic story! The style definily keeps the reader attached trying to figure out exactly what's going on. I really think the switching from dreams to memories to somewhere in between was a great way to get Cho's mixture of feelings and conflicting love out there for us to understand.
Poor girl just wanted to be normal again, but she gets so strong at the end, and considering we never really see her as strong, I think it's a great change.
This was a very creative challenge piece! Good job!
Jami Report Review
This was great and I quite liked it! What I really loved about this was the meeting in Cho's first year. It's just such a special moment and a really unique one too. It was just something different to what others had and it was so cute!
Dreams are a common plot throughout, but I liked yours. It went from moment to moment, but you wrote it so that it really felt like a dream - it just went from one scene to the next nonstop and the moments you chose to write about were lovely. I thought you characterised Cho, Harry and Cedric all well. I'm a little skeptical that Harry would say "You look beautiful, by the way." In the books he came across as very shy and unknowledgeable and awkward about these sorts of things. I also liked the ending - how she couldn't choose so she cried. It was just nice to see some reason behind the crying and get to know Cho behind what we see in the books. All in all though, a really nicely written fic! :)
- MM Report Review
I do have to tell you that crying!Cho is not my favorite Cho. This is how I felt about her in the books.
I did like the little sequence that you put your story in, addressing the time that Cedric and Cho first met to the whole dream where it shows how she feels about him. I personally find it a little hard to write dreams but the way the story flowed made it seem very dreamlike – the location shifting without her realizing or questioning it was good. It’s what happens in my dreams: I go from place to place without even realizing that it happened nor really questioning it.
This was nicely written.
xChar Report Review
So this is a bit of a trip--I mean, all the switching around of characters and the time, whatever it's doing :P I was really disappointed when Cedric didn't believe Cho, though, because she really could use some goodness in her life, even if it is a sort of imagined life, at that.
I think Cho will come to the conclusion in time that you can love every person and it still isn't enough sometimes. That is what seems to be happening. I'm not sure if we're meant to be left with a feeling of hope for her or, rather, hopelessness, but I have some kind of faith in her ability to heal eventually. There seem to be signals in her dreams that point to her wanting to get better, like the fact that she's allowing herself a second chance in certain parts. Then again, that is a sort of moving backwards and could also be symbolic that she'll never get over things.
Overall, I thought this did a good job of incorporating all the prompts, and it's a solid entry. Report Review
Woot for Ravenclaw! This was a very conflicting story, between feeling cho's pain and empathizing with her and wanting her to just snap to and be okay. I can't imagine being in her postition. Great job with this!!
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