I can't believe how heart breaking this is. This is one of the best stories involving Fred's funeral I have read particularly because it focus's on Ginny and this is one of the best just because there is so much emotion that has been poured into it.

I can imagine Ginny reacting this way at his funeral especially when she said she wouldn't have been able to cope with an open coffin and that is a very realistic. I also loved the touch of Fred at the end. That was absolutely lovely

Well done!

Author's Response: Aww thank you! I wanted to focus on each of the Weasley's individually since they are all having different reactions. I'm glad Ginny came across well! Thank you!

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Aw, this was sooo sad. I swear its stories like these that really make you want to yell at JKR for killing off poor Fred.

Everything about this peice was perfect. I loved the emotion you portrayed (heartbreaking though it is). I feel like you really captured another side of Ginny here. A lot of people like showing her as a sort of angry red head who dates a million boys. I loved that you didn't do that. She seemed sensitive here, and of course devistated. The way you mentioned her boyfriends didn't make her sound like she had a billion ga gillion of them. It was like she was just a normal teenager who dated a few guys.

I don't think I saw one error with spelling, or grammar. The pacing was perfect, the flow was perfect.

This was just brilliant. I read a lot of fics, that are like half way there. They are good, but there are

areas that need work. I can happily say that I don't see one thing that I could critisize about this piece. It was short, but sweet.

So really just a great job. Keep up the good work

-BW24

Author's Response: Hi! Thank you! Your review made my day :P

I'm glad you liked Ginny :) I hate it when she's made out to be a girl who dates every boy she meets. It annoys me. She dated three guys, if I remember correctly.

I'm glad you thought it was good! I was nervous about this piece, because it's hard to write this way. So I'm glad you liked it!

~Sara

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Aww this was cute too. I would have liked to see a little more emotion out of Ron, but I still liked how he talked to Fred, almost as if he was still there. And I really like your ending bits where Fred talks to Ginny and Ron. It's really cute and makes me want to cry. Poor Fred :/

Anyways, good job! Can't wait for the next chapter!:)

-Amanda

Author's Response: Thank you :) Ron's emotions were difficult for me, just writing in his pov :/ I hit a bit of a block.

Thank you :)

~Sara

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Hey, it's me! Thanks so much for entering my challenge! I know it was probably really hard to write based off of a quote and I'm just glad you got an idea from it :)

First off, this was extremely sad. I usually only think of how hard it was for George to lose his twin, but then Fred also had 6 other siblings who lost a brother and whom it was also equally as hard on. Of course George was closest to him, but that doesn't mean it didn't effect the other siblings just as hard, ya know?

I really like your idea that you're doing (I'm guessing your doing a chapter from each sibling/member of the family?) because it really uses the quote quite well. Losing a family memeber is always really hard, not to mention a sibling. I really thought you nailed Ginny's emotions in this chapter and I'm anxious to read the next chapter (Ron is my favorite character and I hate seeing him sad) :) Good job!

-Amanda

Author's Response: Thank you!

I'm planning on doing one for each member of the family. George will be at the end, since he was closest to Fred :(
I'm glad the emotions were good :)

Thank you!

~Sara

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Please please please continue with this story! I love how it shows little pieces of the Weasley's talking to Fred at significant points in their lives.

If only Fred was there to talk to Ron and wind him up it would have been so lovely but its also interesting that Ron turned to him when he was so nervous to talk to rather than someone who was on the earth and could talk back.

You really showed Ron's nervousness but also his personality, talking about Victoire.

Fred's reaction was typical Fred which was lovely! Well done

Author's Response: I will continue :) I've turned into an angst writer at some point, but I don't remember this...

Fred definitely would have wound him up, but Ron still loved his brother (h)

Thank you!
~Sara

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This is so super sweet and sad! I don't know what to say to it really!

Ginny seems to be so broken down from her brothers death which is different to the fiesty persona to which she usually loves to have. To see her so broken must have been hard for Harry and I like how you mentioned him being next to her so he could almost seem like her pillar of strength.

Talking about the past and how he and George used to joke around and look after their little sister is really bittersweet because at the time Ginny wanted them to go away, to stop being so overprotective and saying they will beat up her boyfriends but now she would probably want nothing more for him to be back doing that and I think you showed that really well.

I also like the ending bit with Fred looking down on her and reminding us that whilst he might be in that coffin and no longer alive, he can still see what's going on and see how his family are affected. What he says to Ginny though is so sweet and it would have been lovely for her to hear him say that but sadly she couldn't making it so sad. Well done!

Author's Response: Yeah, sometimes Ginny needs to be weak too :(

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it, these are a bit more difficult to write than other stories :)

~Sara

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