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Review #1, by ReeBee Prologue

30th December 2013:
Hi there! You've got a nice start! I'm here for the HPFF's 12 days of reviewing challenge!

The description is good and the dialogue and plot flows nicely :) but I do have some CC :)

The first is maybe characterisation. It came through super clearly but it doesn't really stuck to JK's characterisation. I think Ginny's a bit more forward than in JK's books. I also think that she's be frowning a bit more. And Harry was a bit too simple and almost immature.

That being said, I still think u should continue, as it is post war and anything could happen :)

Good job! I think u have a very strong base here!

-ReeBee :)

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. Its lovely getting one for whatever reason. I have been trying to figure out where my stories are going but at the moment I have no idea. I will try and focus on the characterisation but I think that Harry has finally earned the right to be a little immature and , maybe the war changed him I will be exploring this in the story

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