So the books have already happened and she is at the beginning of them? Struggling on this point. Also, very short chapter. This should have been included in the previous. Mr. Tumnus though...

Author's Response: See this story is after all the books have taken place (The series was set in a different time period and this is the next generation) I am just playing in the Narnia universe. As much as I would have loved to add in Mr. Tumnus it wouldn't have made much sense because he isn't around except for in the Lion Witch and the Wardrobe. I know the chapter was short but I couldn't put the poor thing off any longer to be honest or it might have been forgotten about... Anyways thank you for the reviews! They are always appricated!
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I very much like the condept of this. However, I feel like the writing style is very rushed. Take your time. Explain yourself. Add detail. IT will do wonders for this story. Also, you said that Wonderland belonged to C.S. Lewis, when in fact it belongs to Lewis Carrol. Be careful on that one! I might stick with this one for a bit, so please keep my advice in mind and keep writing! This is a very creative idea and I love it.

Author's Response: Thank you silvertounge for the CC I will try to slow down and explain a bit more. I just try to make my stories a faster pace because the longer they are the more I just ramble and add word vomit.. I ALWAYS confuse Lewis Carrol and C.S. Lewis! I'll go find and fix that. Thanks for saying you'll stick with this and I'll try to get the ball rolling on this story again.
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LLG

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Good job! I like it, I can't wait to see were you take the story!

Author's Response: Thanks :) I'll think up a lovely next chapter for you! Updates might be slower though since school just started up... but I hope you stick with me!
XOXOXOX,
LLG

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