This made me laugh so much :D 10/10Author's Response: Thanks! :D
HAPPY HOLIDAYS! :D Report Review
Hey it's potterweasleygranger from the challenge. I am so sorry for how long I have taken to r and r your story and post the results of the challenge (which will be up ASAP) but I have been super busy with school.
Anyway to your review:
This was a very entertaining story with creative humor that kept me interested until the end. It had a good story line and it fitted the cirteria of the challenge well! I also commend you on your use of onomatopoeia and your characterisation of Sirius was excellent.
The song that you chose fit the story well, even though it was not required for your story it was a fantastic addition.
All in all great story and thankyou for particiapating in my challenge! :)Author's Response: Hello there! Don't worry about taking a while, I understand that real life can get in the way (sadly). :p
I'm glad you liked it, it was written a while ago so I'd nearly forgotten about it! :p
When you said my use of onomatopoeia, I was like "huh? When did I use that?" :p
I'm glad you liked my characterisation of Sirius! He's a tough cookie to write! ;)
ahahaha I was having an "I LOVE EIGHTIES MUSIC LET'S LISTEN TO EVERYTHING ON REPEAT!" So that's where I got the inspiration from! :p
It was a great challenge, I think it was my very first! :D
Thanks for creating it and reviewing this! :D Report Review
Oh, this is brilliant! I was smiling throughout the whole thing, and laughed a bit, which is a good thing! Peter and his cheese, Sirius and his muggle fighting skills, and Lily and James' sexual tensions, Remus not wanting to partake in a brawl, Snape and his overgrown bat self. This was great!
My favorite line;
"Do you want some cheese?" Ha! That was so irrelevant! But I loved it all the same.
And I enjoyed how you tied in Pat Benatar's song. It fits well. Great one-shot. It was simple, but it was greatness.Author's Response: Thank you so much!
Yeah, it was irrevelant but I couldn't just have Peter sitting there not doing anything, he was part of the Marauders so he would have had to talk to them :p
Yes, I love Pat Benatar, I wish I was an 80s kid :(
Thank you so much for reviewing :D Report Review
I loved this. :) You did a great job.Author's Response: thank you! :D Report Review
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