Hi there, I'm really enjoying this story!
My one comment about the story itself is I'm hopeful you reveal why this is a different school than Hogwarts soon.
I also have a tiny bit a constructive criticism, if you don't mind. You seem to have changed from Past Tense in your earlier chapters to Present Tense and then back to Past Tense. I think you might want to stick with Past Tense.
I am new to reviewing stories, I have been a fan of this site for a while, just reading stories, and have recently made an account.
One of my 'pet peeves' is spelling/grammar mistakes in books/stories, so I apologize if I am just being picky.
[Side note: I love that your banner includes the awesome Ms. Alexz Johnson, being a fellow Canadian, I am a fan of hers!]Author's Response: I am really glad you are enjoying the story so far. I am having such fun writing it.
I may have to slip that into one of the early HoM classes, it's nothing too sinister, Hogwarts is still there, just some family's chose to move from Britain due to the unrest during and after the war. The recognisable canon characters however all have reasons for the shift that will be explained during the story. hope that's what you mean, but I'll try to explain in the story as well.
Thank you for that CC. I ha noticed that the other day when rereading through and I need to go back and fix it. I don't know why it happens, sometimes I seem to slip between tenses and not even notice that I'm doing it. Not being picky at all, in fact I love picky, I can't improve unless people tell me what I'm doing wrong so feel free to be picky.
I'm glad you decided to join up and even glader you chose to read my stuff. A huge thank you for taking the time to review it as well and I hope you stick around to see how things turn out.
She is really great, believe it or not, but that's Elyssa. Shhh, don't tell but there is a reason she is blond in the banner but redhead now, and it's not hair dye.
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Awesome, very good. So um if you don't mind me asking what were the news houses called before.Author's Response: Thanks big time for the review. Love every comment I get from my readers.
Um, the houses are Acheron, Evenstar and Silverclaw. They weren't anything before because this is a new school, not Hogwarts.
I hope you are enjoying it so far, and i should have a new chapter up again next weekend, if I can finalise the chapter map for it. Report Review
Love it! Logan's a really likeable character, like Harry (and I like the "Harryish" quote from Tonks. By the way, I'm getting hints that perhaps he's the headmaster of the academy?). And I can tell Teddy's quite like his father, I'm glad he and Logan are friends. Shame Isla isn't old enough though :( would have be great to see her more in the story. All in all, great stuff, and I love that you are regularly updating :)Author's Response: Thank you for the review, really glad you're enjoying things so far. Logan is a bit like Harry though I think he's a bit more spontaneous. It's of the reasons for this story, is to show how the schooling would have been with out voldemorts influence.
Didn't read the whole acceptance letter did we (,lol just kidding) but we'll get to meet some of the teachers in the next chapters.
I think a lot of who Teddy is, is influenced by his peers and the attitude of the word, all of which will be clarified in a coming chapter, but his personality ismuch like his did while Isla ismorerelaxed and Tonksish (glad you liked th Harryish line too). And fret not Isla shall be along in good time but there is another character coming who is very similar, someone from Elyssa's past.
I've been outlining this one for quite sometime so a lot of it is very easy to write. Hopefullyi can keep up a steady stream, but they're not being beta'd so feel free to be cruel about spelling and grammar so i can fix them. Report Review
Love it! It's like I'm reading Philosopher's Stone again :) I'm interested to see what direction you're going with this, so looking forward to the next chapter!Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review. I'm syched you like it. Still got some work to do on the next chapter but so far I've been posting a chapter every five days so I'm gonna try to keep to that schedule, despite the House Cup. Report Review
Solid plotline and engaging characters. Dialogue feels a little forced at times but overall very good.Author's Response: Thanks for the review. Glad you enjoy the characters, hope to build on that solidly in the next few chapters as we meet the other students.
Thank you a bunch for the constructive criticism. Most reviews don't give me much insight into my writing (especially as I rarely have my work Beta'd anymore) so these help me as a writer and are much appreciated. I will try to work on it for the next chapters.
I would love to speak with you on the dialogue further if you're willing on the forums. My username is the same as my penname.
Thank you again for the review and I'm glad you are enjoying it. Report Review
Loving it so far! Can't wait for McGonagall to get into the action, hopefully alongside snape, brilliant keep it up!Author's Response: Oh McGonagall has a big part coming up, but her time at Hogwarts is coming to a close.
Glad you're enjoying the fic so far. Might post Chapter 2 today. Report Review
This is really good! I can't wait for more! Umm, good job and keep up the good work! I'm glad to be your first review! :)Author's Response: Thanks for the read, and even more for the review. I have been working on this one for over a year now so i'm really glad you are enjoying it. Reviewing Chapter 2 atm and may even post it before the end of the day. Report Review
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