I just couldn't help but notice that Hermione's name is misspelled as Hermoine throughout the chapter. Report Review
I was beginning to worry that you'd forgotten us! (Would have done this as a review of chapter 5, but already reviewed it.) Still checking several times every day for your story to update! :-P I hope everything's going well for you. G'bye for now! Report Review
Oh my god. Holy crap. YOU ARE AMAZING! :O :O :O :O :O :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :)Author's Response: Thank you so much :) I really appreciate it Report Review
Of course I read (and liked!) the new chapter, I just hadn't seen your response to my other review, and still have a difficult time figuring out what to say here. I check for updates to your story at least twice a day, so chances are I'll have read any new chapter on the same day it posts. :-P Thanks for writing to entertain us all!Author's Response: Thank you so much for being so devoted! :D This review legitimately made my day. THIS makes me want to write more and post it NOW! Haha thank you so much, you are amazing!
Loveee it Author's Response: Thank you :) Report Review
Okay, I normally hate leaving reviews because I don't know what to say, and feel really stupid. However, given that if you explode, you can't finish the story, you managed to find a way to make me type a review anyway! :-P That said, I do enjoy your story, and am eagerly awaiting more of it. So no exploding! Other than characters in said story, at least. :-PAuthor's Response: Thank you so much for this! :) I'm glad you like the story! Hopefully you read the new chapter, and it's not the best, but I thought it turned out okay. Anyways, I really appreciate the review! Report Review
please update the story soon!Author's Response: I will! :) Working on it today! Report Review
OH. MY. GOODNESS! NEXT CHAPTER PLEASE! YOU ARE A CRUEL PERSON FOR SUCH A CLIFFHANGER! JUST KIDDING! BUT STILL! I NEED MORE! :)Author's Response: Awww yay, someone likes me story! New chapter should be up soon, finishing it up today! :)
Well that was beautiful. Legitimately the best chapter you wrote and I can't really explain it but it was extremely well done. Again, no problems and keep it up.Author's Response: Thanks Krystian :) Report Review
More development, this chapter was awesome and I liked the way you played out the scene. Good Job! I see no problems in it. Report Review
Found a typo (If it matters to you for perfection or something) "Who knows? Maybe the both would."
That was very well written and the buildup from year to year was incredibly descriptive and a realistic path in which their relationship would escalate.
The ONLY setback in the entire chapter was "Time flies when you're having fun". I think that section ends better with the sexual innuendo and goes to the next morning. Report Review
Hey! This is surprisingly good, I definitely like the way you went about introducing the characters and feel about their current relationships and how both of them are fantasizing about a relationship together. The only set back I really see is some of the wording such as "that slut Lavender". For me personally it takes away some of the professionalism of the writing, otherwise awesome and keep it up. Report Review
SO AWESOME. KEEP WRITING YO.Author's Response: Oh Shelby :) Please log off of my account though, lmao Report Review
This is really good! :D I would have liked more background on how their relationship developed though, it feels a little sudden for them to love each other straight after the battle, maybe a prolouge at the beginning of this? :) You write extremely well by the way!! :DAuthor's Response: Thank you so much! and yes, that is a great idea! I was planning on a possible elaboration in chapter two, almost like a prologue, but now I think I'll write a flat-out prolouge instead. Thanks again! :) Report Review
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