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Review #1, by Badname Step 1: Get Lily to agree

14th August 2012:
You have me intrigued now. It sounds as if there is some harebrained scheme in order :-)

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Review #2, by Angelique Aspis Step 1: Get Lily to agree

29th July 2012:
When I saw the title, I HAD to read this story! You have some funny lines in here; "I hope it doesn't make you get bloated" had me laughing out loud.

The paragraph in which you describe how Lily doesn't want to feel this way, but she loves James so much it's like a hole in her chest when she thinks about never seeing him again is very good.

Here's something that's a little fuzzy: Do the three friends know, or have a really good reason to very strongly suspect that James is being tricked or coerced into marriage? I have a hunch that this is what you have in mind, because otherwise the wedding-crasher plan would never work. You've established that Charlie has the scoop, and that he convinces Lily that Madison is tricking or blackmailing James, but what we don't see is HOW Charlie convinces Lily of this.

Speaking of Madison, the name pulls the characters out of time. This story is happening in the late 70's, when the name "Madison" for a young woman born in 1960 would have been virtually unknown. If you tell me the reason you chose "Madison," I can suggest a name that would be in keeping with the times.

Can't wait to see what kind of plans they are making!

Author's Response: YAY! I'm glad you like the story and it made you laugh!

So to answer your question. Ginger and Charlie know something is definitely wrong because they are friends with Sirius. Sirius confines in them and that's how they come up with the whole idea of breaking up the wedding ;) So Charlie and Ginger believe him but that doesn't mean Lily will. But everything will be better explained in the next chapter!

I didn't really think much about the time frame when naming the bride to be, Madison. To be honest I actually googled stuck up names and that's one of them that popped up :/// But I will definitely PM you on HPFFF to see your suggestions. I was thinking of just sticking to a present day time period but I think I'm going to actually try doing a 70 theme kind of wedding! that sounds like fun :)

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Review #3, by 80 Black Step 1: Get Lily to agree

12th July 2012:
I'm impatient for the next chapter! If there's anything you could improve, I think it would be to add a smidge more character detail- what do they look like and stuff. But real, fandabbydosy! :P

Author's Response: Thanks for the review and thank you for the suggestion of improvement! that got me thinking on how to improve the next chapter. I just wanted the first chapter to be light and quirky, ya know? But once again thanks for that. I will surely update with some great details :)

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Review #4, by Opalpixiechick Step 1: Get Lily to agree

2nd July 2012:
I love your story. :) I can so see Lily doing this. I can't wait to read the next chapter. Keep up the great work. :)

Author's Response: THANK YOU!

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Review #5, by Prongs_Doe_97 Step 1: Get Lily to agree

1st July 2012:
i really love it when is the next chapter coming

Author's Response: I'm still adding some final touches for the next chapter, it should be up soon!

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