It is a bit slow but thats alright because you are still setting up the story. I think that what you have going is pretty darn awesome and I hope to see it continue. The pineapple aspect should be interesting. Please keep going with this, I'm rather curious! Report Review
Hello there! I'm back to stalk, er, read this wonderful story. I've got some catching up to do!
You had me hooked at the first line, "he’s getting on in years and twice as daft as he used to be." Have I *mentioned* your witty characterization? Even the small bit about Ron thinking that the sun shined out of Robert Wright's you-know-what; it's so like him to impulsively adore somebody the way that he did Viktor Krum (pre-Yule Ball). You do such a lovely job. It's the thing about this fic that I love the very most, I think.
Your description of Rose and Scorpius's relationship is wonderful. You tell us so much without bogging us down with information. I think this is one of my favorite lines that I've read so far, "To him, she was fire. She was smart, she was curious, she was angry, and happy, and sad, and passionate, and as wild as her unruly red hair."
How interesting that the Ministry is cracking down on people who own House-Elves. I like how you've taken this bit of canon and really run with it. Very nice touch!
Oh my god, what a heart-wrenching scene with Mr. Fennel and the baby. And how disturbing that Allman did such a terrible thing and then was playing with the baby. He really believes that they're doing the right thing. You've built a very believable reality that could easily be canon--horrible, and very Orwellian, but believable.
I really want to know what the Pineapple Conspiracy is! I liked the foreshadowing, with the lotion. Really well done.Author's Response: Eep! Thank you so much for your review (which took me forever to respond to! O_O)! I'm so glad you've enjoyed the story thus far, and that you think the characterization works, because that's something I worry about, especially considering that all of the canon characters we know well are old in this story.
I'm possibly the slowest updater in the history of fanfiction...but thanks so much for your support and review! I really appreciate it! Report Review
Wow, strong, gripping start to a story! I love those headlines, and am curious as to what the Ministry's become...and how it reached such an extreme political situation.
Also, the chemistry between Scorpius and Dom sounds promising and it'll be interesting to see how their relationship develops.Author's Response: Thanks for the feedback! I've hit a bit of a stumbling block so far in the story, but I'll get back to this, I swear...
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Awesome banner. Even better title. :) I think this plot is interesting too, with the notion of assimilation. It's really interesting that you decided to make words like Muggleborn and Half-Blood illegal; it's like the Ministry took an ideal situation and turned it almost dystopian.
What an attention-grabbing introduction! "He could write though, and had a knack for being in the right place at the right time. Except for tonight." Really great work.
I love the characterization of Scorpius and Dominique. The reader really gets a feel for them up front. I like Dominique's bitterness especially, it's very natural and allows the plot to progress rather than being an unnecessary personality trait.
You use really clever descriptive language. I particularly like, "A lacy tablecloth covered the scars and pits on the wooden surface. Parchment covered the tablecloth, and writing covered the parchment."
A really nice start. I'm adding this to my favorite stories list so that I will be able to keep following!Author's Response: Thank you so much for stopping by! I'm so glad you like the idea behind it--I'm just trying to set up a scene where it seems somewhat plausible. And thanks even more for the feedback on Scorpius and Dominique, as I can never be sure if they sound like legitimate people or not, haha. It's slow going, but this will be updated eventually! Thanks again for your kind words! Report Review
I'm really sad that this story doesn't have more reviews. :( Well, I'm here to fix that!
This is actually really interesting. The idea that the Ministry has gone to the other extreme - forbidding anyone to mention bloodstatus - as a way to prevent another war happening is very intriguing. Most Next Gen fics are very light hearted and more humor-centered (or the ones I read, at least) but I also like the possibility of there being another war and that the danger and conspiracies haven't ended.
I'm also really enjoying the characters. Dominique/Scorpius is one of my favorite Next Gen pairings and I'm really looking forward to see their relationship develop.
Good job and please update soon!
-Camila :)Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for the review, purplewings! So far, I'm trying to build up more backstory about why the Ministry would have gone to this extreme, and what the drawbacks are--which I think may take some time. I've got part of chapter 3 already written (in which some old characters will come back!) and hopefully that'll be up soon!
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Really great so far. I especially liked the introduction with the moon beams and dead reporter, it was really well written!
Scorpius and Dom should be interesting. Looking forward to more!Author's Response: Thank you bester! I'm hoping to update soon! Report Review
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