Beautifully written! I do hope you write a Snape novel! Report Review
Please continue this story!!Author's Response: It was a one-shot, but I'm glad you liked it! I would love to continue it :) I am considering starting a Snape novel in the future, so look out for it, if ever it does materialise! Thanks for the review!
Laura xxx Report Review
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That was very, very good! I like reading and it's well written. It's not popular to explain Snapes thoughts.and I think you just gtet it right. Thank you!Author's Response: Thank you so much! It's so kind of you to drop by and leave a review :) x Report Review
The fact that this story has zero reviews is simply a tragedy (and just so you know, it's so late and I'm so tired that I spelled "tragedy" with a T instead of a D the first time around; you're welcome).
Anyway, this was lovely. I love me some epic angst, and this, as promised, was soaked in it. If I may be so bold, your writing reminds me of my own, which, if you hate my writing, I'm really, really sorry that I said that. :P
I love your use of adjectives here. And, OK, pretty much every writer uses adjectives (unless you're Hemingway and writing about a war somewhere), but yours have... spice. You choose really interesting ones like "unruly" or "lank." They really freshen up whatever it is you happen to be saying, and it's wonderful to read.
And gahhh, this line: "and years breathed past like winds from the north, turning him colder, freezing his heart." Your personification here (and littered around this whole piece) is just... gah. I can't even describe it. Granted, I'm a total sucker for personification, and I love a good round of turning inanimate objects into things with human-like qualities, so I may be a bit biased.
I love, love, love your writing. Your descriptions are full and lush and you even used SHAKESPEARE, who I need to write in all-caps all the time because he simply deserves it.
xx RinAuthor's Response: Haha! I am going to share a secret with you - my spelling of tragedy is somewhat of a tragedy itself. I ALWAYS do that. Even when I am not tired haha!
Thank you very, very much :) I have actually edited this little monster and the new and somewhat extended edition will probably be validated tonight/tomorrow. But yes, it IS major angst. Sometimes I think angst and I should just marry and get it over and done with, seeming as its the one genre I always fall back into, no matter how badly I write it hahaha!
BAHA, Hemingway! Are you basing this on 'A Farewell To Arms'? Another confession: I didn't enjoy it. I know, I know. But it's HEMINGWAY. And it was too dull. :/ I DIGRESS. And I'll also stop shouting. Thank you tons for the compliment - I admit I do really try and find the right word otherwise it just wont sound right - and no one wants that! And, p'oh, Rin, you KNOW I love your writing, so that is literally THE hugest compliment there ever was in existence ever ever ever!
I'm glad you liked that line! Genuinely, you know when you just randomly get a line in your head and like, write it down ASAP, and you FORCE it to exist somewhere in your piece? That was one of those lines, haha. I was like, I MUST GET THIS IN. -high five, brain-
Haha, Shakeywakey was my inspiration for this actually - I started writing this one shot the night before my English Lit exam on Gothic Literature, and I was like, I need to quit revising. I was trying to remember that quote actually - AND I got it in in my exam, probably because I had fussed for so long over it the night before trying to craft a little portion of insanity from it, haha!
Thank you for a lovely, lovely review. You really are such a wonderful and helpful reviewer, and person, too! Thank you a million :)
Laura xxx Report Review
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