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Review #1, by jtz Stars Hide Your Fires

22nd May 2015:
love it thank you for writing it

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review! It's really kind of you to swing by :) xxx

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Review #2, by HermyLuna2 Stars Hide Your Fires

21st March 2015:
This is very tender and sad. I really like that you chose the Shakespeare quote as inspiration for your story. It gives it an extra dimension.

Your writing style is really good. I like your descriptions and how you have enriched some sentences with similes. You managed to let us get inside Severus's head and you portrayed his feelings really well. I am happy that you have given him the same desperate obsession as he seemed to have had in the books. You also added a tad of his petty jealousy by reserving a few lines for James. Only Snape gives his enemy so much attention, which I think is both a funny and sad/pathetic aspect of him. I'm glad you kept that in line with the books.

He may be a bit too masochistic in some lines though, unless "it was fitting that he was alone" was meant in a sarcastic, bitter way.

I love it when stories make me want to hug Severus. When you wrote "he stumbled", I really wanted to. "She could not be his in truth" is a great sentence. The conclusion is heartbreaking. I've always seen Severus as someone who occasionally indulged in fantasies about Lily having chosen for him, so I'm glad someone else shares that vision. Well done!

Author's Response: Heya!

Thank you so much for stopping by, and leaving such a lovely review! I'm really glad you liked this one-shot because it was my first time writing with Snape so it was quite a learning curve! I think he's a really fascinating character, but I'm really pleased this one-shot worked for you :) Thanks for reviewing :)

Laura xx

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Review #3, by wolfgirl17 Stars Hide Your Fires

28th December 2014:
Hi love,

Sorry it took me so long to get here, but I'm here with your requested review, finally.

Trust me when I say that this version of Snape is not too dark. I think you've captured his bitterness and his loneliness with such poignant grace that I'm left feeling a little breathless.

This story has rocked me considerably and reminded me of that darker side to Severus Snape that I've forgotten as I've romanticized him in my own works. He is a bitter and angry man, wounded by his own actions and with a resounding and biting hatred for all things in the world but Lily Evans.

You've really captured that here and I honestly don't think it needs editing. It's already perfect. I like his dark self-loathing, his fantasies about killing James and taking his place in Lily's heart and in her bed. It's very Snape-esk and perhaps the most real and most moving piece of writing I've ever read about Sev.

I loved it. I truly did. If you do write another Snape Fic you must send me a link and request reviews on your chapters because you've hooked me with your writing style and the infinite level of quality you bring to your writing.

Keep up the fantastic work and don't hesitate to request other pieces for me to review. I may stalk your page and give you gushing freebies if you don't ;)


Author's Response: Hey there! No worries at all!

Thank you for such a thoughtful review - I admit this is one of the one shots I've written where I really was proud of it when I finished. But at the same time it gave me a lot to think about because snape is such a difficult and complex character! I don't think its bad to romanticise him because I think there are positive elements to him too, but I'm really flattered that this made you think more about his character - thank you so much.

Ahh you are far too kind, thank you! I'm going to keep working on ideas for a snape fic because it's something I really do want to do - and when I've started I'll let you know. Thank you so much for the support - you're honestly the best!!

Laura xxx

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Review #4, by Medbh Stars Hide Your Fires

15th October 2012:
Beautifully written! I do hope you write a Snape novel!

Author's Response: Thank you! Maybe I will one day :) xxx

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Review #5, by Becca K Stars Hide Your Fires

3rd July 2012:
Please continue this story!!

Author's Response: It was a one-shot, but I'm glad you liked it! I would love to continue it :) I am considering starting a Snape novel in the future, so look out for it, if ever it does materialise! Thanks for the review!

Laura xxx

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Review #6, by Kumo Stars Hide Your Fires

1st July 2012:
Only one comment so far?
That was very, very good! I like reading and it's well written. It's not popular to explain Snapes thoughts.and I think you just gtet it right. Thank you!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! It's so kind of you to drop by and leave a review :) x

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Review #7, by Indigo Seas Stars Hide Your Fires

29th June 2012:
The fact that this story has zero reviews is simply a tragedy (and just so you know, it's so late and I'm so tired that I spelled "tragedy" with a T instead of a D the first time around; you're welcome).

Anyway, this was lovely. I love me some epic angst, and this, as promised, was soaked in it. If I may be so bold, your writing reminds me of my own, which, if you hate my writing, I'm really, really sorry that I said that. :P

I love your use of adjectives here. And, OK, pretty much every writer uses adjectives (unless you're Hemingway and writing about a war somewhere), but yours have... spice. You choose really interesting ones like "unruly" or "lank." They really freshen up whatever it is you happen to be saying, and it's wonderful to read.

And gahhh, this line: "and years breathed past like winds from the north, turning him colder, freezing his heart." Your personification here (and littered around this whole piece) is just... gah. I can't even describe it. Granted, I'm a total sucker for personification, and I love a good round of turning inanimate objects into things with human-like qualities, so I may be a bit biased.

I love, love, love your writing. Your descriptions are full and lush and you even used SHAKESPEARE, who I need to write in all-caps all the time because he simply deserves it.

xx Rin

Author's Response: Haha! I am going to share a secret with you - my spelling of tragedy is somewhat of a tragedy itself. I ALWAYS do that. Even when I am not tired haha!

Thank you very, very much :) I have actually edited this little monster and the new and somewhat extended edition will probably be validated tonight/tomorrow. But yes, it IS major angst. Sometimes I think angst and I should just marry and get it over and done with, seeming as its the one genre I always fall back into, no matter how badly I write it hahaha!

BAHA, Hemingway! Are you basing this on 'A Farewell To Arms'? Another confession: I didn't enjoy it. I know, I know. But it's HEMINGWAY. And it was too dull. :/ I DIGRESS. And I'll also stop shouting. Thank you tons for the compliment - I admit I do really try and find the right word otherwise it just wont sound right - and no one wants that! And, p'oh, Rin, you KNOW I love your writing, so that is literally THE hugest compliment there ever was in existence ever ever ever!

I'm glad you liked that line! Genuinely, you know when you just randomly get a line in your head and like, write it down ASAP, and you FORCE it to exist somewhere in your piece? That was one of those lines, haha. I was like, I MUST GET THIS IN. -high five, brain-

Haha, Shakeywakey was my inspiration for this actually - I started writing this one shot the night before my English Lit exam on Gothic Literature, and I was like, I need to quit revising. I was trying to remember that quote actually - AND I got it in in my exam, probably because I had fussed for so long over it the night before trying to craft a little portion of insanity from it, haha!

Thank you for a lovely, lovely review. You really are such a wonderful and helpful reviewer, and person, too! Thank you a million :)

Laura xxx

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