Hmmm well I loved the plotline, but the story structure was very choppy. I also thought if you had started earlier or explained more of what happened between them, it would have help connect the read to the character. I like what you have here. it is really good, but you are telling me a lot of things not showing me. Take the extra time to describe her tears or the feel of her heart being stabbed when she hears the voice. I think if you take a little more time to expand this story it could be awesome rather than good. Just some friendly criticism. Overall, well done.
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This was a really good piece of writing. I am an HHR fan but I love sad stories like this. Harry was always capable of breaking Hermione's heart and somewhere deep down I believe that he actually did break her heart by ending up with Ginny.
Sorry for the rambling. This was really good. Keep it up :D Report Review
WOW short but powerful, poor Hermione.
Well done a very good, quick we read. Report Review
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