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I think that you have a very interesting idea here! The cliff-hanger at the end of the previous chapter certainly caught my attention. A werewolf for a father... And it looks like the pregnancy won't be as smooth as Tonks' was.
Originally when she was talking about being worried about that night, I thought she was talking about how she was going to tell her parents that she was pregnant... Or that she was going to visit a Healer to check on her baby's health... Not that it was the full moon that night. But that certainly is one way of learning about how much the lycanthropy gene will affect your child!
At least Dominique is in a better position than some- Bill was scratched by a werewolf and so hopefully won't hold it against someone if they were a werewolf because he knows how accidental the shift can be for the victim.
As well, I liked how you have Dominque working in Capture Unit instead of one of the more mainstream areas of the Ministry. Though it might not be the most interesting of work, it certainly does explore a necessary and underdevelopped part of the Wizarding world. And it's nice to see that Hermione's worries about the House Elves did get somewhere, even if it's not doing much good in the way she intended for it to.
However (and this is just a small thing) I was a little confused in the first chapter because you had Dominque run out of her flat and then try and calm herself down in her office's loos- why would she run to her work? Was it because she had nowhere else to go? Or did I just miss a transition somewhere?
All in all, I think that you're off to a very interesting start. It'll be interesting to see what happens as her pregnancy progresses- I don't think that having a baby werewolf inside of you will be fun when the full moon comes around. Would it try to shift as well? I suppose I'll just have to wait and see where you take this story... :) Great work! Report Review
Alayn from the forums with your promised review!!
Goodness, talk about a curve ball at the end! As if having a baby isn't enough. First, I feel an instant connection to Dom, considering I am pretty much at the same stage in my life right now. Living in an apartment with a roommate, still young; I cannot imagine having a baby. I would lose it, just lose it. So I felt a real connection to her panic, and her attempts to calm herself by creating a new plan that fits with this new development.
The werewolf cliffhanger really opens up new ideas and possible problems for your character, so I am really excited to see where it goes! Not only does this make me worry about the possibility of the baby being a werewolf when it arrives, will this cause complications in the pregnancy?
As you can see, I've already started fretting about your character, and that is always a good sign! I am quite curious to see where this is going, so I think I'll take a hop and a skip over to chapter two and see! Report Review
Another great chapter Em :) I love it.
Your story is so interesting and unique and it's not the normal pregnancy story (like mine...shameful) lol I hate how you left us at a cliffhanger I really want to read some more. This is an amazing story!!Author's Response: Agh, I didn't really want to leave it on a cliffhanger, but it kind of happened that way! I'll try not to do one for the next few chapters though.
Thank you :) Report Review
Oh thankyou for updating!!! Great chapter!
I'm super keen to see what happens next! Please update soon!Author's Response: Thank you! :D
It shouldn't be too long for the next chapter either. Report Review
Hey Em I'm finally here with your review :)
So anyway I would like to say that I love this story already (actually from the moment you told me about it) the chapter flows really well and you've really captured Dominique's emotions well. I love the fact she doesn't like to lie and would much rather have everything out in the open. Honesty is the best policy...at times anyway :p
I'm really intrigued to read more about this and I love the cliffhanger.
I want more :) keep it up my dear!
I know this review was a bit pointless lol my bad. Hope chapter two is in the cue :DAuthor's Response: Thank you Jess! :D
Yes, Dom is very honest. She hates keeping secrets and so the news will be out very soon, if she has it her way.
:) Report Review
Oh interesting story idea! Please update soon!
Oh and also great banner!Author's Response: Thank you :)
The banner is being replaced soon though! My one was just a place-holder. Report Review
Love the cliffhanger :)
This is really good and you have captured Dom's thoughts and feelings really well.
I shall be looking forward to the next chapter to see what happens
-Potterfan310Author's Response: :D Thank you for reading and reviewing! Shouldn't be too long before the next chapter is up. Report Review
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