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Review #1, by katwithlove she watches the world

12th June 2015:
Hi. I'm here for the HC 2015 Amazing Race Challenge, for Gryffindor!

Okay after reading this I'm severely heartbroken, but your language is so beautiful. It's so descriptive and lengthy. It flows perfectly and there's honestly no other way to describe the way you wrote it but eerily romantic. Which sounds terrible because you can't really romanticize a murder, but the way you wrote it makes it this whole other animal.

You're a really amazing writer and I'll definitely be reading more from you in the future.

I think the fact that everything is all description and no dialogue makes it all the more really difficult to write and you've done brilliantly. Some parts we're extremely bone chilling by the way you described them. Especially when you're describing her keeping vigil at the window.

Also the way you use actual colours to describe emotions and to add on to the drama that's already going on is really interesting. I'm now quite fond of that concept and I think it adds a lot to your writing.

My favourite part would have to be the saddest, but also the most heart breaking. "White—the plume of light that floods the stairs. Black—the shadow in the door. Red—the mouth that orders her to move. Green—" It's so basic and primal but packs a lot of punch. It's extremely bold and strong.

I was hanging at the edge of my seat while reading everything.


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Review #2, by BoOkWoRm24 she watches the world

1st August 2012:
Wow, this was amazing.

I've never thought about the house at Godric's Hallow as a prison, but now that you've brought it up, I can see exactly how Lily would view the house as a prison. Especially because I couuld see her having more connecions in the outside world that she couldn't talk to, while I got the impression from the books that James did have some communication with his best friends.

I love how you related the house to a burial ground. Again its one of those things that you don't think about, but when you hear it it sounds very accurate.

And then the last line, that was my favorite. The way you went through the colors describing where each was from then leaviing the last one Green for your reader to infer was perfect. I thought you executed the entire don't mention who's talking thing really well.

Again this was really well written and I don't think I can think of one complaint. So good job.

Hope to see you around the BvB battle again some time.


Author's Response: Hi Liz,

That's definitely what I was thinking. It might have kept them safe, but it had to have been very hard for Lily to be isolated.

I'm glad that the imagery at the end worked for you, as did the ambiguity. I wanted it to be a bit mysterious at first, but still obvious once you thought about it that it was Lily.

Thank you so much for the lovely review!

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Review #3, by CloakAuror9 she watches the world

19th July 2012:

That was completely amazing. This is one of those stories that make you sit there in awe as your brain processes everything. I sat here like a complete idiot for a good ten minutes, staring at the author's note and thinking over and over again 'Wow. That was epic.'

I always thought that you had a skill for imagery when it comes to stories. I never took much notice of it though when I read Vital because I just considered it as one of the many talents you had. But now, take away all the dialogues, oh man, you can blow people's mind away with your talent in under one paragraph.

The story is fantastic. I didn't realise that it was a James/Lily story until I got to the middle. (Silly me for not reading the summary or the information at the top.) I think it is very fitting that Lily would feel such a prisoner in her own home because her attitude and character. She likes to have freedom, and the house gave her everything but that. James, on the other hand, is completely 'captivated', for lack of better word, with Harry. He must've been a great father, if only he -both of them- lived to see the many good and great things Harry has done. *sigh*

Like said before, I thought the story is really fantastic. This is going under my favourites (not counted as your prize) simply because it is amazing. Its something I would love to go back and read over and over again.

Stay awesome,
Izzy xx

Author's Response: Hi Izzy! First I just wanted to say that I totally thought I'd already responded to this review, but I realized that I hadn't. I don't know what happened, but I'm sorry it took me so long to respond!

Anyways, thank you so much! It is wonderful to hear that you had that reaction to this story. I know that I've definitely felt that way about other author's works before, and I love stories that make you think. So to hear that you felt that about some of my writing really is great!

Thank you for that! My style does change from when I'm writing Vital (a longer chaptered story) to a one-shot like this one. I enjoy trying to create something that is more reflective and metaphoric and descriptive and that doesn't need to rely on the build up of a plot to be interesting.

Actually, I also wrote this for another challenge, which specified that there be some mystery as to whom the narrator (or focus) is. So, while you could have found that out by the summary, it's a good thing that there was that bit of mystery for the first part of this :) I agree with that as well, James and Lily both would have been great parents. It's interesting to explore that might have been with James and Lily because I feel like they had to be such extraordinary people to be so brave at such a young age.

Again, thank you so much for this review, and for hosting the challenge in the first place. I am so happy that you enjoyed reading it, and really don't know how to coherently respond to this praise. ♥


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Review #4, by forsakenphoenix she watches the world

1st July 2012:
Oh, this was fabulous! Your imagery is always such a strength of yours and it really shines here. Everything is beautiful. I can't get over it. There are no words, really, to describe how much I adored this fic of yours.

I've read a few fics about this time period and the idea of Lily feeling like a prisoner in her own home. I love the idea that James isn't really affected by this at all. And that line about being bound together and the one truth that she knows is that fact, it just..gah, my love for James/Lily knows no bounds and it's words like that that really means a lot to me in terms of their relationship and how strong it had to have been to get them through those times.

Then, The night is coming. Such a short sentence with a huge impact. My stomach dropped, and then everything after that...the repetition from before - it was all so perfectly executed.

And the end! The colors and then ending on green, as the last color she sees from the killing curse...just, so so powerful. This was so well-written and beautiful and I am so in love with your writing. You're a fabulous author, beyond talented, and I'm so glad to have found your work. ;)

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Review #5, by Phoenix_Flames she watches the world

29th June 2012:
Oh my gosh! This was an absolutely fabulous piece! I loved it so much! It was just so beautifully written!

Honestly, your descriptions were flawless. I really almost felt as if I were reading poetry. Or something like that. The imagery just went together so brilliantly and I could picture everything so clearly. I could feel it all so well.

I loved how it was in present tense, also. I really felt as if I were going through the story with her more as she lived it. And there at the end. It was sort of chilling. The colors you throw in there and their significance.

Wow. Just such a brilliant piece! This was so great! Geez, you are so talented! Writing, graphics, all of it! You've got it all! :P Loved it, hun! :)

Author's Response: Hi!

Wow. Thanks for the lovely review! I almost don't know what to say. I'm so glad that you enjoyed it! I find pieces like this (that tend towards metaphors and other imagery) fun to write and concoct.

It's also great to hear that you connected to her story in the piece. Really, I'm so flattered that you have so many nice things to say about :D

And, haha, that's kind of you to say. I definitely still feel like I have a lot to work on in both areas though (like writing comedy -gasps-). But really, thanks so much! :D I know I'm rambling so I'll stop this review here and now. ♥

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