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Review #1, by Live Life Large Class disruptions

2nd July 2012:
First off, I want to apologize for how long it took me to review this. I've been busy, and I wanted to take the time to leave a nice, long review. Hopefully I can make up for it(:

Writing from Roger's point of view was very original, and it gave this story a unique twist which I really liked. I get kind of tired of reading stories from the same person's perspective over and over, so thank you for being original(:

I really wasn't sure how you would do when you chose this prompt because it's such a small one, but you really brought it to life. You kept this short and funny, which I really enjoyed.

One thing I wanted to point out was the flow where you wrote, "...because if the Professor would see him looking around...". I think it might read easier if you changed that to "if the Professor saw him."

Also, to help the flow from talking to arithmancy to potions, you might want to add a little something in. Maybe like, "What with all of his arithmancy problems, it really didn't help that his favorite class was constantly interrupted," or similar. I went back and reread the arithmancy bit, and while I can understand why you put it there, it feels a little tacked on.

Besides that, this was perfect. Thank you so much for participating in my challenge and for the great entry(:
Live Life Large(:

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Review #2, by maskedmuggle Class disruptions

15th June 2012:
Hehe, this was a simple and enjoyable story to read :) I liked it, especially when you revealed why Roger was in detention: -to yell "Burn!" every time Professor Snape takes points from Gryffindor. that's a pretty amusing idea, hehe. I guess I like how it seems quite believable, especially with Fred/George always mucking up and losing house points (my other favourite bit was when Fred/George were mouthing burn at Roger for getting detention in return!)

Maybe Roger seems a bit unrealistic for a Ravenclaw to be 'shouting burn', but he seemed quite peculiar and we didn't know anything much about him from the HP books anyway, so it is still believable in a way. Snape was a little abrupt randomly giving Roger detention - I thought he would have told him to shut up long ago.. although, I guess Snape could have hated the Weasley twins so much he didn't care about what was basically an insult to them.. Anyway, I did like reading this - a nice story and nicely written :)

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Review #3, by Riya Potter Class disruptions

14th June 2012:
"burn" is supposed to be hot but the story was really cool! Snape was perfectly in character and so were George and Fred, especially when Fred mouthed 'burn', it's so typical of him to do. In short, the story was worth a read.

Keep writing... :)

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