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Review #1, by Amanda Tran The Prophet's Daily Prophecy

14th July 2012:
This chapter was amazing and just a good a
the HP series!! Please write more and I
definitely will read it! Good luck!:)

Author's Response: Aha wow, that's a pretty big compliment, thanks Will do :)

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Review #2, by Angelique Aspis Malfoy Manor, revisited

5th July 2012:
Finally! A story in which Scorpius is not nice! Interesting start. I must point something out to you. The following sentence doesn't mean what you intend:

"Im sure Astoria has no wish for Scorpius to be so far from home, as I did when Draco was that age.

I know you intend for Narcissa to say that she didn't want Draco to go to school in another country, but what you've written is that Narcissa DID want Draco to be far from home.

I suggest breaking this thought into two sentences:

"Im sure Astoria has no wish for Scorpius to be so far from home. I felt the same when Draco was that age.

Author's Response: Aha, I was sat there for ages trying to work it out, but I understand now, I'll change that then. Just to warn you, he becomes a LITTLE bit nicer in the third chapter (I think it's that one :s) but he does go back to being mean again later so if you read it, don't be too disappointed! Thanks for the review :)

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Review #3, by deathly hallows 101 The Owl and the Armour

28th June 2012:
That's really, really good! Nice plot and description! Please write more soon. Can't wait for a fourth chapter!!!

Author's Response: Thanks, happy you liked it :D I'm writing the fourth one now whilst listening to the second film soundtrack (hehe). Bit scared I'm not going to make the queue before it closes for a week omg :S

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Review #4, by bester_jester The Lion and the Serpent

20th June 2012:
Ooooh love it! I have the feeling she and Hugo are going to have a thing...

Really loved this chapter. What year is Scorpius in? Ahh I want to read more :)

Author's Response: I can see that happening too ;) Weeell, I'm trying to keep it as close to the books as possible, which I think makes him a third year. The next chapter should be out soon, thanks for the review :)

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Review #5, by bester_jester Malfoy Manor, revisited

20th June 2012:
A great start. It would be great to hear how Violet feels about going to school, and what she thinks of her family.

You've done a great characterisation of Lucius - still a grumpy mean guy! Love it.

I found that the ending was a bit blunt, and in your story summary you've spelt 'generation' wrong. Also, 'good' in the title probably wouldn't be the right word.. 'well' fits in better.

Anyway! Sorry I'm really picky, but I feel like this has heaps of potential! Off to read the next chapter :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much, I'm glad you like him, some death eaters never learn ;) Any advice is appreciated, especially spelling, I'm really big on getting it right. Hmm well I don't know, this might still sound really illiterate, but I meant good as in "good and evil" as opposed to something going well, if that makes any sense, but I get what you mean :S Anyway, I've written like a whole novel in response, but thanks for being the first reviewer!

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