Intresting start to the story. Is this story going to continue past Mary leaving for school or is it just going to focous on the difficultys of Dudley accepting his daughter is a witch? The ministry employe was a bit rushed, almost as if you had another idea and changed your mind and tried to make it up on the fly, however you did state that you would rectify that in the next chapter. Cant wait for that to see how this story is going to flesh out. 8/10Author's Response: As it stands now - It will end with Mary getting on the Hogwarts Express. Depending on how it goes, I MIGHT be tempted into continuing it...but it wouldn't be in this story line - it'd be in something slightly separate.
I know it was rushed...I tried to drag it out, honestly I did! But hopefully it will work out in other chapters, also the reason why this was a bit more rushed. We haven't seen the end of our Ministry employee - but it was simply a very, very hectic, very busy and very rushed day - poor buggers are quite understaffed.
I hope I can rectify the hurried-ness to some satisfaction in the next few chapters.
Actually I rather liked it. I am a bit surprised at Dudleys attitude, given his last words to Harry. I do have suspicion just who is Mrs Finnegan, but I'll wait till you reveal it. I do hope you have another chapter in queue. It's a wonderful start.
FoMAuthor's Response: Thanks!
I know Dudley's attitude is a bit different - it's something I toyed with when writing this, and all will be explained (I hope) in one of the upcoming chapters. Let's just say there WAS a hefty bit of time in between those last words and this - plenty of time for something to possibly have gone awry yet again.
Oooh...you have your suspicions, do you? Well, we'll just have to see if you're right or not! :)
Chapter should be up in a few days, actually...I've been tweaking it, trying to give a bit more information than in this one to make up for the rushed-ness of the first meeting. Report Review
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