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Review #1, by Your Secret Santa Man & Wife

14th December 2012:
Hello it's your Secret Santa!
This is a fabulous interpretation of Molly and Arthur's wedding that is totally believable! Congratulations on thinking up such a unique plot!
First and foremost, I would like to commend you on your perfect description (again)! I especially love your first paragraph and the way you used many adjectives to paint a word picture in my mind eg. SOFT glow, PEA GREEN dress robes and SNOW WHITE lily. Keep it up :)
Just a few very, very, very minor errors that I am sorry to bring up because they are very small. At the start of the chapter you wrote the word lilys like this, however it is actually spelt lilies (see what I mean, very, very minor!) also, I noticed a few wording errors such as "was put one foor in front of the other" Iím assuming you mean FOOT by looking at the context of the sentence but I thought I should let you know to avoid confusion!
Other than that this chapter was PERFECT!
Lastly, I love how you changed the POV a few times in the chapter. This is always a great thing to do because it gives the reader a fresh perspective and helps us to understand ALL of the characters better! Great Job! :D
I hope you find this review helpful. I very much enjoyed reading this first chapter; it was so very sweet and romantic :) Please keep writing this. I've noticed that you have not updated this for a while and I think that it is definitely worth continuing!
Thx for providing a wonderful story to read!
Your Secret Santa!

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Review #2, by dirtydeedsdonedirtcheap Man & Wife

19th June 2012:
Hello! Dirtydeedsdonedirtcheap here with your requested review. So you were worried about the characterization of Arthur and Molly. I love Arthur and Molly so I'm very excited to read this. Let's get started!

I tend to do a running review, I hope that's okay with you.

She smiled at her reflection and thought to herself that she didn't scrub up too badly. The robes she was wearing weren't brand new, there hadn't been time for all of that fuss. They were a little moth eaten in places and as Molly played with a particular hole she thought that if there had been time to plan a proper wedding she would have loved a new set.

I think it is very Molly to think to herself that she doesn't 'scrub up too badly.' I thought that was funny. Aw! Itís her wedding day? At first I thought she was getting ready to go on a date so maybe thatís why she didn't have time to get a new set of dress robes. I can imagine her wearing pea green ones with some holes but not really caring too much about it because it's not about the outfit but more about the day.

Molly, I want to marry you. Right away. The world is changing, there are dangerous times ahead and before any of that starts I want you to be my wife.

I'm in love with Arthur. That's just...him. I hear him in my voice saying those words and the look he gives her is just magical. I'm the worse when it comes to review requests, I hope you don't mind my gushing but you have no reason to worry about your characterization about the two. You are really able to define their warm nature without saying too much but not giving us too little.

Molly's heart jumped as she spotted Arthur stood at the other end of room, his back to her.

Stood should be 'standing'

put one foor in front of

foor should be 'foot'

He knew in his heart of hearts that Molly would never have said yes if she wasn't one hundred percent sure, no-one forced Molly Prewett into doing anything she didn't want to do.

Okay. So what I really love about this is how you use Arthur to give us insight who Molly is and Molly to give us insight on who Arthur is because you could have easily had them think about themselves and give us a look into who they think they are but instead their focus is on their significant other and that fits for a wedding based scene.

This was marvelous! You really tugged at my heart strings. I felt so happy while reading this, their emotions effected me and that's all you can really ask for when you write something. I can't wait to read the rest of the collection. Thank you so much for requesting. I'm sorry I wasn't much help since I enjoyed this so much! If you have any questions/concerns please feel free to PM me.

- Deeds

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Review #3, by ginerva_molly_weasley Man & Wife

18th June 2012:
This is a beautiful fluffy little piece which I really liked in more ways than one.

The contrast between the two points of view, first with Molly before the wedding, then with Arthur in the wedding then Molly afterwards really helped this story come alive and made me think it was more believable.

I also loved the little snippets about Molly's brothers and Amos Diggory as it added more credibility to the story and made it seem to be really believable. I loved the references to the shabby clothes within there too as it showed that it probably wasn't the way either of them had envisaged the wedding!

Well done!

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing!

I'm glad you liked the nods to the other characters. I wanted to cement the story in the midst of the Weasleys canon timeline and I thought adding other people in would help, glad it worked!


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Review #4, by Ever Man & Wife

17th June 2012:
I saw the link on the forums, and I just hhaadd to read it!

This was so cute(: I've never actually read them like this before, and I think it was a brilliant breath of fresh air(:

I think your style was wonderful, as was your imagery. The flow was pretty decent as well:D

I like this. A lot.

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it! Sorry I am only just replying to this review!

I had so much fun writing this so it's lovely to hear that you enjoyed it.

Thank you for reviewing!


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Review #5, by TenthWeasley Man & Wife

16th June 2012:
Callie, this was adorable! You know I'm always up for a good fluffy romantic story, and boy, you delivered! I've got all these warm, fuzzy feelings floating about inside me now. :D

Given that we never really see Molly and Arthur at this age in canon, I think you've got them characterized very well. Throwing in that bit about Arthur and Muggles at the end, too, was an especially nice touch! I can very much see this being how their elopement would have gone, too: The slightly dilapidated robes, the shy looks, the hurried feel, the simplistic beauty of the rings. It's a very realistic way of describing things.

I love thinking about the people these two will become: The parents of one of my all-time favorite literary families. ♥ I adore the Weasleys and am so, so excited to see what you've got in store for the other nine chapters on down the road! I do hope we'll see lots of adorable little children -- baby Weasleys are the best. :D

Great job, Callie -- I really enjoyed this. And I'm already looking forward to the second chapter! :3

Author's Response: Okay so I SUCK at responding to my reviews *hides face in shame*

So glad you think I got the characterisation right!! I really wanted to convey Molly and Arthur as a pair of young people who are just really in love with each other. I loved writing Arthur's bits the most because I just have this adorable image of how in love with Molly he was and always has been in my mind.

There will be plenty of baby Weasleys to come. I'm writing the second chapter now which is about baby Bill :)

Thank you for reviewing and I shall let you know when I have the second chapter up :)


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