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Review #1, by Miss Muggle Their Trip To Gringotts

3rd July 2012:
Your first slash? That makes this even more impressive ;) Luna/Hermione never crossed my mind before and I definitely like the way you've done this. It makes them both seem so much more human, you know? The way Hermione talked about her curiosity "phase" and Luna's almost the mature one in this situation, having come to terms with her bisexuality and all. I love the way you've characterized them both! Theyre both in character, but different too, if that makes any sense.

As for my criticism, I really only noticed technical errors. Like "Hermione and Luna was on the winding rails" and "Luna was very quite on the trip." Of course, "was" should be "were" and "quite" ought to be "quiet." Nothing huge at all, though, which is very good :)

Im glad you like this exercise. I definitely thought it would be one of the more exciting ones! You definitely came up with an interesting combination and you pulled it off very well. Well done!

Thank you for entering the challenge!

Author's Response: Yes, it was my first slash. And thank you for your wonderful comment. I was really nervous that I might have over done it. Thank you.
~Goddess Faith


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