HAHAHHAHAHA! Okay, Sorry.
Hey, What's up? This is GrangerDanger76 from the forums for team Blue! :)
So, I'm sorry, but they way you just described this entire chapter, was absolutly hilarious and totally perfect.
You were able to establish relationships and Lara as a motherly role at the same time as maintane an interesting plot and a very interesting spin on Her and Albus.
I like Lara's quick sharp tongue, it makes me currious as to what will happen with those two mixed together! :)
Great Job! 10/10
~GD76Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm glad you liked it :)
Hello there, It's me for your review swap.
I think this is a pretty interesting idea, how Lara was the one trying to act like a mother to all her friends. However I do think the plot is a little cliche now. I can already guess what's going to hapen and trust me, if that hapens people generally become un-interested and stop reading. However you can change that and perhas put in some twists it might become a little more interesting to read on.
Nice first chapter.
>BeccyAuthor's Response: Thank you for the insight. I'll work on that plot twist :) This has been really helpful :) Thanks. Report Review
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