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Review #1, by GiddyGryffindorGirl Stuck up customers, a red faced mother and sneaking out at night.

18th June 2012:
This is a really good story :) Can't wait for the next chapter! Added to Favourites :D

Author's Response: Thank you!

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Review #2, by majamariamaja Stuck up customers, a red faced mother and sneaking out at night.

18th June 2012:
I like the idea! :)

One tiny, little thing that bothered me though... The correct way to write the he said, she said, I said thing is:

"You tell mum I'm going out, I'll tell mum and dad you've been dating Rose Weasley since fifth year," I threaten.

Use a comma, see? :)

Another example:

"Larissa, table 5 is ready to order," Tanya tells me.

Looking forward to see where this story goes! ^^ This is definitely getting favorited :)

*Maria

Author's Response: Ah, thank you so much for that! I get confused sometimes, haha :)

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