AMAZING IM ADDICTED! NEED MORE NOW!Author's Response: i uploaded a new one it shall be up in 2 days! Report Review
Hehehehe. I've read this story like ten times. And I know the ending! Ehehehe. Good Job. 10/10!!
Keep writing ;)Author's Response: muaah love you Report Review
WAHHH? I think I might be sick. How could you let her sleep with Sirius? I mean, he's an okay guy, but I'd rather have Regulus for sure. ;__;
Lmao, I love how you write for Bellatrix, making her their sister, instead cousin.
And the fact that all three Blacks are in the same house, at the same time is just screaming for even more trouble.
I agree with the other reviewer, it is weird to call Voldemort 'Tom', but oh well~
So, I also guess Bella isn't married to Rodolphus?
I'm curious to see where this story's gonna go..
Hope you keep writing :)Author's Response: I would rather have Regulus as well!
Yes, i thought it could lead somewhere interesting if i made all three of them siblings, and share a house.
Tom hasn't gone all voldemort on them yet. but he might you will have to seee.
Well they aren't older yet. im not saying she is going to marry rodolphus, and im not saying shes not. They are only like 18 or 19
Thanks as a new writer on here reviews make me happy :)
Hi Kylee! I'm so sorry I didn't notice this earlier! I wish I could figure out a way to use the 'rss feed' but I think I'm just to much of a technology basket case to work it. I can't even imagine how it must be trying to upload a chapter from an ipod.
This was a really neat start for your first story! (also, congratulations on posting your first one, it's a huge step!) I think it's going to be interesting to see how Regulus gets in too deep with the Dark Arts, and how Emilyanne will be a factor in that; especially with her news of her night with Sirius.
At first, I thought it was a little strange that they would be calling Voldemort 'Tom' being that they will be followers, but I kind of thought about it and it's just because the Death Eaters are just starting up, right?
You asked me for a few pointers when you told me about this so I have a few suggestions: First off I know how impossible writing on an ipod is, and I know editing would be 12 times worse, but the character names (Sirius, Regulus, Bella) should be capitalized :)
I can only imagine the distain Sirius must have been having to be spending 'quality' time with his brother and cousin! I am interested to see what the outcome of Emilyanne's sleeping with him will be in the next chapter, as well as the developement of the Death Eaters.
Just a few tweaks here or there (watch your punctuation too; I noticed a few sentences without periods or commas. Speaking from experience, it's those little things that readers will notice that they will appreciate if you take the time)
I hope this was at least a little helpful to you! Your reviews always mean so much to me so I had to jump at the chance to return the favor :)Author's Response: HEY! thanks so much, i recently dropped and lost my ipod in a lake so i wont be using an ipod to upload. I will be concentrating more on punctuation though.
Also in this story i have Sirius, Regulus, and Bellatrix siblings. It might be weird but thats just how i decided they should be.
Yes! the Death Eaters are just starting up, so he hasn't gone all 'LORD VOLDEMORT' on them yet. Also i don't go into too much detail on Regulus getting into the dark arts, Emilyanne just thinks he goes to work everyday.
It means a lot to me that my reviews mean a lot to you! i always enjoy your stories! Report Review
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