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Review #1, by victoria_anne Treasure Hunts

25th October 2016:
HPFT Team Vampire Review

I knooow I say it ALL the time, but I seriously do love popping in on your author page and becoming seriously conflicted over what to read next.

The "squiggles" is so great! I love the word and love the idea. Very clever. And Dennis, out of all people, is such a great character to choose to write about. It's so sad to think that he gave up on magic because of Colin :( But understandable, of course.

Ahhh oh my goodness what a perfect little one-shot. I love the pirate references throughout the story, and that last line is perfect. I always think it can be risky using an OC for a one-shot, but you are so amazing at it.

I love the happy ending. For Lyra, but mostly for Dennis. You manage to weave so much backstory and detail into such a small space. It's a feat I envy. You do a remarkable job.

I hope you're enjoying your day!

♥ Bianca

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Review #2, by velajune Treasure Hunts

12th April 2016:

When I saw Dennis' name, I jumped the gun and just went for the story without further thought. I'm glad that I did.

I have this story I'm writing where she turned out like your Dennis. And it really hit home for me, this story. I'd always wanted to read a story of what happened to Dennis after the war. More than the trio's epilogue, I wanted to know Dennis'. Colin was one of my favorites and I balled when he died. I could never imagine Dennis' story without Colin because it was like looking at George. It just breaks my heart.

So, I'm thankful there was this story, a story that tells of the grief Dennis went through and that your Lyra's kindness saved him.

It actually inspires me to think about his story.
Great stories inspire, I think. :)

Author's Response: Hi! Thank you so much for coming by to review! I really, really appreciate it.

I'm really glad you enjoyed the story. I definitely wanted to address Dennis' grief after the war, and also explore some interesting wizarding/Muggle overlaps. Dennis probably spoke to me more, in this story, than Lyra herself. But then again, I was happy with how their interactions turned out as well.

You flatter me with your talk about inspiration. But that's the beauty of hpff, I think-- when you read someone else's take on a character, you can often find your own ideas going in a thousand directions as you begin to try and take your own spin on that character or situation. It's so nice to hear that you got a little of that from this story!

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Review #3, by Freda_and_Georgina Treasure Hunts

8th April 2016:
Hello! Just wanted to stop by and leave you a review.

So this story. I absolutely loved it. I really liked how you had post-war Dennis and how this was a relationship that wasn't romantic. I really loved how Lyra wanted to get to know Dennis in a lovingly platonic way, you don't see too many of those.

I also liked your post-war Dennis. I was not at all surprised that he tried to live his life as a muggle after Colin's death. You could tell in the books that Dennis relied on Colin for almost everything so this was really realistic.

One last thing; the ending. I absolutely love how this ended for Lyra and Dennis - especially Dennis' boy being a wizard! It's just such a perfect ending where you can just tell it will make everyone's lives so much easier.

Overall, this was a great story I'm glad I got to read.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for coming by to review! I really, really appreciate it. Logging on to see so many random reviews really made my day, and I know reading and reviewing takes time and effort, you can't just jump in and out. So many, many thanks to you.

Also, I'm really glad you enjoyed this story! I had and still have so many reservations about it... I really wanted to write about post-war Dennis, and a platonic relationship between a man and a woman, and to explore the blurry line between Muggles and wizards, AND fulfill this challenge that gave me a quote I fell in love with... Gah, it was so hard. I think the result was that I tried really hard to fulfill those things and the plot completely fell to the wayside. So it's really, really nice to hear that you picked up on all those components and enjoyed them, because those were the ones I cared most about, too.

I'm glad you like the ending as well! Thanks so much for coming by and reading this long one-shot (another thing I was worried about!) I appreciate it so much!! You've helped restore my faith in this story.


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Review #4, by XxImAgInAiReXx Treasure Hunts

2nd September 2012:
Well, at first I thought this would be a Dennis/OC, but I'm really glad it wasn't! It was so sweet, how they just became friends instead of the whole cliched 'my-wife-left-me-because-I'm-magic-and-now-I'm-running-to-you-hey-let's-have-a-romantic-relationship-since-clearly-we-belong-together' thing.

And cliches are cool. It's just a nice change to see something that isn't.

I loved how Lyra just coolly turned Leo away, like, 'Hey, you messed up my life! I am not falling for you again, no way!' instead of the 'Well you really screwed me up but I think I might be falling for you and then there's this guy who I eventually end up with and you fall off the map, leaving a big plot-hole' scenario.

Also, just gotta say, I love Ben and Timothy. They are adorable!

In short, this story is awesome. A devaition from the norm, and a surprisingly pleasant read. You made your characters believable and the scenes you put them in plausable. It's pretty awesome.


Author's Response: Thank you for the review! I'm pretty worried about this story, because I had so many different directions I wanted to pull it in and the result is rather long-winded and choppy (in my opinion). I am glad to see you enjoyed it, it makes me feel a bit better. And Timothy and Ben... They were characters who weren't really necessary to bring in, but I just had to write them, they were so adorable in my head (this is why the story is so rambling...)

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Review #5, by charlottetrips Treasure Hunts

3rd June 2012:
I'm so happy that I came over to read this today. I like the way it's not dependent on any sort of main character at all and that's it's made up entirely of OCs and very minor characters. It's refreshing to think that there is more to the wizarding world than just the Weasleys, Potters and Malfoys. And it's people with real lives to boot!

There was a small typo I saw in the beginning but as I'm typing on my iPad it's a little hard to go back and copy past and continue this review :P or I'm just lazy.

You managed to flesh out Lyra, Dennis and even their families to a small degree in this one shot which is admirable and envious. :) Lyra was someone I actually could connect to with her compassion and far away crush (which honestly I was hoping would work into something more). Dennis' haggardness was justifiable and his happiness at the end was wonderful to see. It was great how you tied the quote in with a small child's logic of the world and the realism that is life.

All in all, I really enjoyed reading this and seeing the arc of Dennis' life that some random but nice waitress could provide.



Author's Response: Thanks for dropping by! If you scroll down my author's page, you'll see I focus on minor characters to the point where it gets ridiculous. :P I think I'm more intimidated by the trio than anything else, but I also enjoy the freedom of minor characters, as I'm sure you've heard many authors say.

I've heard of a few typos, so I'll have to go back and look for them, thanks for the heads up.

Once I figured out Dennis's plot, it was tempting to go right through the story focusing on him, just using Lyra as an outsider looking in. But there had to be a reason to use her, otherwise the story would have been sloppy, so I scrambled around looking for a way to give her a story that would enhance Dennis's rather than taking the attention away from him. I think (hope?) that the end result improved the story.

Thank you for the lovely review! I'm really glad you enjoyed it.

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Review #6, by MagicalInk Treasure Hunts

2nd June 2012:
There, that's what this gave me. And I'm so thankful for it. It's funny how you managed to make this magical world seem so realistic we can identify with it. With Lyra and Dennis, and just every character that had its flaws and problems, it was great.

For a moment, I thought this was going to be a short story or something of the sorts. Because it is what it inspires to be, the characters having so much background already. I was feeling it was going a little too fast, and then I realized, sadly enough, it was a one-shot. So I guess that'd explain the quick flow.

I wish I could ramble more on the characters, how much I love Dennis and the fact you gave importance to his aftermath, but that's end up in an internal battle of my side who sort of by some clichéd reason wants him with Lyra, and my heart that wants him to keep his life and love and his wife to accept him. And Lyra, with Leo finally off her, is certainly going to get more NEWTs. See how much hope there is?

Every word is sopping with hope, and even if there's not much description, it is nice to read. Talking about imagery, I would have loved to know more about them all, and the places, the smell and the light. Just a bit of everything you know? His eyes, hers, the walls and the coffee scent. Actually, that's the only thing I have for CC. Grammar is great and I think I only noticed two typos.

So overall, it is great how fast I could read 4500 words and be soaked with encouragement and hope. And lovely real characters. Outstanding job! (as always ;) )
- Val

Author's Response: Thanks for dropping by! I think that you didn't mean for that comment about the pace to be as much of a constructive criticism as it was a comment, but believe me, it's something I'm working on. You've read the story, you know how long it is, so I was trying really hard to keep it at a manageable length, and unfortunately that messed up its pacing. But I'm on it. ;)

I've heard a couple people mention how they wish Dennis ended up with Lyra, and I blame myself for leading you all down that path. Originally, this was going to be a story about an affair, but that was clearly going to be too long, so I scrapped that idea. However, bits and pieces of the early drafts can be found here, mainly in the parts where Lyra is attracted to Dennis.

I can get sappy really fast, so I see how you would find this bursting with hope. ;) I definitely hear you on the imagery, it's something I need to work in stories other than this as well, and I'll look into it. Description was one thing I think I cut down on when I realized that this was going to be a sizable one shot, and I didn't want to scare anyone away with its length. As I already said, I sacrificed some pacing for that as well.

Thank you for the really, really lovely review. It's great to hear that you got so much out the characters!

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Review #7, by angelicdemon1209 Treasure Hunts

28th May 2012:
This is sooo good!! Really! Wow.. I am so impressed...!!
Dennis is such a great character, and I really like Lyra too. This story makes so much of sense. There isn't the usual fluff or anything. This is just one of the sweetest stories I have ever read..!

Author's Response: Thank you for the review! It's reassuring, because I feel like there is a LOT to be worked on here. It started off as a fluff piece (I was actually considering getting Lyra and Dennis together, and you can still see the remains of that plot) but I'm not a very fluffy person, so that's where you find more of the dramatic parts. I did my best to give Lyra and Dennis their own separate stories, but keep the focus on them as a pair, and it's something I'll continue to work on.

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