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Review #1, by SeverusSnape15 Training 101

18th July 2012:
This story is getting very cute. I still think you need much more detail to it, though, sweetie. I see many typos and grammarical mistakes. You don't want that in such a short chapter. A beta would help you a lot with this. It's still a very cute little story. .-. Also, mothers can't feel a baby kick at fourteen weeks pregnant. It usually starts around 20-23 weeks. Thank you for entering my challenge. The results will be posted in a week or two.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review

I wanted to write the childbirth, but annoyingly, I got writer's block for the birth. So annoying. Maybe post challenge, it will be written.

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Review #2, by SeverusSnape15 Christmas Announcement

8th July 2012:
Hello there. Cierra(SeverusSnape15) here from the forums. Thank you very much for entering my challenge, it's very much appreciated. I do enjoy reading the entries. This is a nice little start to the story, but...I think it went way too fast. You need much more detail woven into the story, even into this chapter. There is so much that goes on in the Weasley house! :) It'd be nice to see some more. Maybe some competitive games, joking around, etc. I'm not sure if you'll get in another chapter before the challenge ends, but good luck and thank you very much for entering. :) ~Cierra.

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Review #3, by potterfan310 Christmas Announcement

15th June 2012:
This is a really good start :) keep it up
Percy in pre/ante natal classes should be funny to read.
Looking forward to see how the plot develops and what happens next


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