Wow, great ending! I loved it. I'm not a huge fan of the story...because it seems like you just completely rushedi t. I don't understand how she can't be upset about her mother kicking her out. Again, with the dialogue. Honestly, I don't see the love between Sonya and Sirius. I can't feel it, really. I'd say more description on that would be nice, because, by the looks of it, it's a very important aspect to the story in a whole. The results of the winners should be up soon =) Thank you for entering, again.

Author's Response: It just passed my time. I'm sorry you feel I rushed it but writers block hit me on this one, so I understand why you may have gotten my time. It was a really awesome challenge. Thanks for reviewing my awfully written story.

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Helloo! Thank you for entering my challenge. This story has a lot of potential, I can tell you that. First of all, it's St. Mungos...Not "Mangoes". I wish there was a bit more detail to this. Sometimes, it can get confusing when you just throw in dialouge without anything else. Since this is an OC, we need to know a LOT more than we do with a canon character. More detail. I don't know much about her, really, besides her name and a few other things. It's a nice start, though.

Author's Response: okay I guess I missed that in editing. I'll edit again later, as to My OC, I wanted her to be the way I wrote her, but I suppose that it doesn't make sense now.

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