I really like your idea of Rose not being a copy of Ron and/or Hermione. I've seen her being depicted this way before but I think yours is the most interesting I've seen so far. And her connection with Arthur was a really nice touch to her character. I find it easy to imagine how easy Arthur and her would've bonded over Muggle things because of Rose being a half-blood. I thought you handled Rose's pain really well and I could almost feel it too.
Ah. A rather nice Scorpius, I didn't see that one coming! And he's a Hufflepuff, wow. This is a really interesting thing on him. I've seen him in Ravenclaw and Slytherin, but not Hufflepuff. I am now intrigued!
Great job! I love it! ♥
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What I found particulary interesting is the way in which you chose to depict Rose in this story. We usually see her as either a miniature Hermione or a miniature Ron and she is always so good at everything it's not even fair. But here, the only thing she has is a connection with Arthur and she lost that before she went to Hogwarts.
Having been really close to my own grandfather on my father's side, I can really feel the emotions she's struggling with and her pain and her loss. That was just so beautifully written it broke my heart.
Scorpius is so sweet. Again, an unprejudiced Scorpius. Very rare. I'd love to see more of these two characters in your vision.
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This was really interesting twist for ScoRose. I really liked that the characters weren't carbon copies of their parents, although I'm sure that Rose will find her own talent (whatever it is) sooner or later. =) Considering Rose was 11, her line of thought felt bit too mature, and I was surprised that even coming to Hogwarts didn't cheer her up.
There was a typo somewhere (Semptember), but otherwise your writing was smooth and easy to read. Your descriptions felt natural and gave good grasp of your characters' feelings. The ending was nicely written. I'm a big fan of happy endings, so it really warmed my heart that she found a new friend from Scorpius.
And by the way, thank you for all your work in the House Cup! Report Review
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