Awesome story. I love Andy and Albus already. You write really well and i can't wait to keep reading your story,
~LoVe-Sirius Report Review
I thought I had reviewed this one as well -.- I had read it... Anywho. 'Superman in a nunnery wearing a flowery cape' I would so like to see this.. I would probably pin a picture of it up somewhere to make me feel pretty ;) That blush! -insert fangirl screaming here- I knew it! I. Knew. It! Go Aldy! You may be thinking ‘potions tomorrow. Ew’ my little munchkin, but what do you do in potions?? That's right! Stare at Al! -sean- I'm sensing someone might have a mighty sexy potions partner soon? -wink wink- But yeah, though chocolates, I like caramel ;) Aha, Thanks for the comment hun :) xx Report Review
Aww Andy! *whimpers* Aldy was going so well up until then... Al's being a meany, I'm sure he likes her really.. That look he gave her when she was is Hugo's arms.. I'M ON TO YOU ALBUS!!!
Anywho, lovely chapter Vee :) xxAuthor's Response: I think I need to send you a PM, make you a massive gift and send boxes of chocolate to you to thank you -sean- the reviews are so amazing to read- thank you :D Report Review
'fly like a constipated unicorn' Ahaha, you do make me laugh... how many unicorns do you know fly on broomsticks? let alone when they're constipated... aha.. Come on Aldy! ;D And 'I made the team. Which meant quidditch practise. Which meant seeing Albus Severus Potter almost every few days in intense, sweaty training.' There's a good chance you'll see him topless to Andy ;)
I just want Andy to get together with him... I just want everything to go well for her...
Lovely chapter, yet again Vee :) xx Report Review
Wooh! Go Aldy! The other one wasn't 12+ -.- I like Andy even more now! It's probably because I'm just as clumsy.. seriously, when I get hurt my mum's all like 'what have you done NOW?!' .-. But yeah, another excellent chapter Vee :) And I know Em's real name now! Da da dun ;) Crazy person rant.. I'm going onto the next chapter now :) I'll review soon :D xx Report Review
Hola ;) I has found your stories :D Anyway, I love this chapter, your personality shines through like the blinding morning sun through the gap in my curtains, only not annoying (the sun is .-.) ... (yes, random, I know...) Anywho, I like Andy :) she seems nice, and a bit like that mental friend everyone has ;) But yeah, I love your descriptions and characterisation :) I'm off to read the next chapter ;) Adios! xx Report Review
Uhm? Where is my chocolate? I am leaving a review! :). I kind of liked it, except for the swearing. Is that really necessary? :). Report Review
Loved it but it was a kinda uneventful chapter. I guess you gotta have some fluff somewhere but this means next time there must be at least one explosion!!! Haha kidding. Unless you love and will do anything to make me happy! In that case an explosion during potions caused by Andy's daydreaming would be called for! :) Love you love you love you! Report Review
Batman belongs to D.C. comics... lol. If only I could get away with stuff like Andy does... Report Review
AL LIKEY ANDY! I can just tell by that look he gave at Andy in Hugo's arms. Report Review
I just thought I'd point out some stuff that stood out for me. First years aren't allowed to be on the Quidditch team. Lily is actually two years younger than Al so technically she'd be in fourth year. Report Review
There are a couple of capilizations there that need to be fixed but other than that it was good. Report Review
I loved the chapter. Andy sounded like a normal hormonal teenager with a big crush on a guy. Well done. Report Review
I LOVED IT!
OMG UPDATE!Author's Response: Naww, thank you! :D the next chapter is in the queue now ;D Report Review
Even though Albus is in the title, is this actually Hugo/Andy? 'Cause if Hugo is supposed to look like Zefron, he is *way* hotter than Albus and he appears to be a better prospect in almost every way.
Poor, poor Andy! My heart would be breaking if my crush treated me like Al did her in this chapter. He certainly did act repulsed and the way he yelled at her and shook her awake at the end wasn't cool at all. Al's a little bit of a jerk right now but I'm willing to believe he can get better if he supposed to be Andy's other half.Author's Response: No- it'll definitely be Albus ^_^ Hugo is just the guy best friend in this scenario :P I myself prefer Logan over Zac ;D ahah :P thanks for the review! xo I promise you'll love Al, in coming chapters >:) xo Report Review
I LOVED IT! I am enjoying the epic new banner. Sometimes I just sit and stare at it for hours and hours and hours... Too much? haha anyway totally loved this I can't wait for the enxt chapter!!! Report Review
I acually love this so much!:) I'm already addicted to it and its only the fourth chapter. I love Hugo, Lily, Al and Rose and..arghh, you have to update really soon, otherwise I will cry! Much love...xxAuthor's Response: Ahh thank you so much! :D I'm really glad you like it so far, I promise to update soon! :) thanks for the review! :D Report Review
This is sooo funny! You made me laugh so hard that my mom threatened to take away the computer, and then she read it and laughed too :)Author's Response: ahaha, thank you! I'm surprised that your mom like it :P thanks for the review! xo Report Review
AH!!! I LOVED IT!!
(just, you know, taking hints from your A/N :P)
ahaha it took her 3 hours to tell Lily her life story concerning Al :D
It's so weird to write Lily here, because (obviously) that's mah name. And she didn't tell me nothing!
YOU ARE SO GOOD AT WRITING. seriously. This story is EPIC. I love it. A lot. :)
Update ASAP please!!
~Lily xxAuthor's Response: eeheh thank you lily pish. xD I love you buttocky. Report Review
Hi! I just found this story and I really enjoyed the first chapter! I hope the others are as good (or better) (:Author's Response: Thank you! I really really hope the coming chapters are better :P Thanks for the review! xo Report Review
Hi there, I'm here with your pass the parcel review.
I really liked this. I loved your original character of Andy. I thought her ramblings at the start were brilliant. They seriously made me laugh. I love how you got inside her head and wrote the story the way she would speak it if she were telling it to someone. I love how random and slightly insane you made her. It reads so well, and I really felt like I was getting to know the character, which is what you want to do when you make up your own original characters. So I really enjoyed reading her.
I loved how you showed all the gang together - that Hugo and Rose were friends, even though they were siblings - that was a nice touch, because a lot of siblings ignore each other in school, so I just thought it was great that you showed them all together as friends.
Just two little things - you said that James dropped out of school - that was very random and I think you need to give a reason for that, otherwise the reader just recoils and goes, wait -what? So an explanation for that would be great!
And now the second thing, can you please try and fix the spacing? It got a little annoying, and having to scroll so much distracted me from the story, and the massive gaps created a fragmented effect that you don't want to have! You should be able to remove them if you go to the edit chapter function in manage stories and just delete each space - it's a little tedious to do, but it will be worth it in the end, because the physical look of the story on the page will be much better! This is a great opening chapter and I really enjoyed, but the massive spaces did frustrate me a bit!
Anyway, great chapter, I really liked it, all spacing aside! Andy is brilliant, so funny and insane and just likeable - well done! :-)Author's Response: Oh wow, thank you so much! It was lovely to read all the amazing compliments and comments you had. I'm so frustrated at the spacing as well, I'm sorry it had an impact on the read :/ Thanks so much for dropping by! :D Report Review
My lord I love this story. You're writing is so... Human I guess. Cause when you write you make Andy so relatable and entertaining that I just can't stop smiling whenever I read this! And you're right about the validators. They really deserved a break! Anyway Author's Response: Hey! Thank you so much for the amazingly sweet review, it makes me want to update and write even more :P Thanks for leaving a review! ^_^ Report Review
OH MY GAWWDDD. Vee! This is amazing! I'm reviewing just like I told you I would with nothing but squees and praise for this amazingness. I just want you to know that Andy needs to back off because Al is mine. I LOVE YOU AND THAT IS ALL.Author's Response: PSH. MY WIFEY! what a lovely review name ^_^ and thank you! :D I love you :) Thank you for the review. methinks Karl is awesome XD Report Review
Vee! I don't understand! Is her owl's name Juliet or Hera??? But apart from that, great chappie!!! One happy reader right here. :)Author's Response: Ughh I may have forgotten to change some ;_; It's Juliet. I jut originally wrote Hera, then decided to change >< Sorry :P Report Review
I just realised that I never left a review for this chapter! DISASTEROUSNESS! so, here it is. :)
I LOVES THIS CHAPPIE~~~ Author's Response: Muahaha, thank you Lily bear :) Report Review
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