Wow what an introduction for the Malfoy's! Can't wait to read on. :) Report Review
I found this story to be refreshing! It's a different take on Lily Potter II and as a fan of her character I'm always looking for an interesting and different side to her. Hope you update soon! Report Review
UPDATE PLEASE ! This story is so intriguing and well-written ! Report Review
This story is so emotional, and Lily's character is just perfect. The way she reacts to what others say and how she interacts with others makes her so believable.
Please update soon!!!
Also, I LOVE Panic! at the Disco! Report Review
I don't usually read dark fanfics, but I'm really enjoying this one and I hope you continue with this story, as it is very well written. Report Review
Omg, finally, a story about insane people! :) ;) :P. I've been looking for a decent one for ages and this one is PERFECT!!update ASAP can't wait until next time!! Report Review
Oh, wow. I hope you put up the next chapter soon! Report Review
Wow. I really, really like this story. It's fantastically realistic and I'm really loving the plot. The stuff that goes on in her head is just so realistic. It's really amazing and has great potential.
Shindig :D who can't be bothered to sign in. Report Review
Yes, and update!
I've honestly waited so long for this chapter, and the ending...Oh, gawd, I need more!
I like Lily's little hostility towards Florence going on in her head. It makes things realistic, and honestly, through everything she's going through so far, I want to reach through my computer and hug her.
And Florence. She's so bitter, and it kind of annoys me that she refuses to accept help. I can relate to her in some ways, yes, but her bitterness...I guess it just unleashes the reality of mental sickness. Not everyone can be helped.
I liked Cheyenne and Florence's bantering in the beginning. It's true. Being in a mental hospital myself, there is a fair share of squabbles that can get pretty nasty, but for the most part, everyone does try to hold each other up.
I just...I don't know. This story really does hit it home for me. Thank you for the update, and I shall await the next. :) Report Review
PLOT TWIST ASDFGHJKL
You're a very skilled emotive writer. Make use of it as often as you can - you already do, but I definitely picked up on it being a strong point in your writing. Absolutely fantastic. It makes the reader examine their own feelings, question their own thoughts...
So. I'm totally excited for the next chapter of this. Will you let me know when you update it? Thank you for filling my evening with such a wonderful literary piece. Report Review
Florence is giving me Ino feels! I read a fic called Peppermint Swirls and Stutterbug Girls in which Ino behaved almost the exact same as her.
I love the array of mental illnesses, I can tell you've studied them all. But what's even better is how normal they all appear for now. Just a bunch of teenagers who are a little fucked up. It contradicts the common depiction that they're all freaky loners who spend half their time with glazed eyeballs looking at walls.
Now, I'm a very busy woman - and by busy, I mean desperate to get to the next chapter so that I can find out what is wrong with Lily - so I shall leave this review at bay. Report Review
I love asylum-fics so much, just because I like to see how the author can get into the character's mind and build on what their audience have limited knowledge of. You know? It's so interesting to see people write about things that you don't generally understand having not been in the situation.
You do this very well. Report Review
Lily's destructive explosion of emotion was written so calmly, but I could picture everything as if she were a wild animal trying to escape from a cage. So excited to read the rest of this, omg omg omg. Report Review
This is a really interesting story! I normally wouldn't read anything like this, but I'm fascinated by it! Update soon!
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Insanely good. It's amazing that you can take such a serious topic on with such grace. Honestly, I don't care if this is a romance - it feels like it shouldn't be. I feel like it should just be about a girl who's not broken, just bent, learning how to fix herself. Lily is...sad. She's very sad. And I really hope she gets better because depression is an awful thing, and so is self-loathing. I'm interested in the familial aspect of her illness. That's definitely a different spin on it. Usually all the Wotters are perfect, Mary Sue types. I think Lily can't see herself and I hope she learns how to. I really want to know who she is and what went wrong. Also, that first chapter? Wow. What a tearjerker. I was swallowing a lead lump in my throat. The way James found her and how he and Albus said goodbye? Jeez. Right in the feels. Thank you for writing about this. It's a difficult thing to do, particularly in the generally fluffy realm of NextGen fanfiction, and I think you're doing it beautifully and quite well. Your representation of the other patients is very nice, particularly the difference between Hailey and Florence. Please write more soon, this is excellent. Report Review
I love this story so far :) It's brilliantly written, especially the way that you manage to get into such a heartbreaking mindset, to write like someone who's so broken. I love Lily, I like that she isn't in denial and she wants to get better. I like Hailey and Doctor Moon too. I think that you're painting a very accurate picture (not that I'd know, but I'm definitely hoping it's this welcoming), and I'm looking forward to more :) Keep writing, this is very good :) P.s I love your username :D xx Report Review
i really like this chapter! and i love the closing quote :) Report Review
I love this! Its really different (in a good way) than alot of the other stories about the kids. Keep up the good work! Report Review
Hello again! I'm rather pleased to see that you have updated, because this story means much to me!
You did a great job with te portryal of what goes on in Mental hospitals. Especially with the peopl. How would I know? Because I've been stuck in one myself, and this is pretty accurate. Kids there help the newbies learn the ropes, and there really always that one kid who deosn't want to heal--always in denial. Wow, just reading and reviewing brings back fresh memories...
And as for Lily's point of view towards Harry, it's understandable. After being the last born in a family full of greatness, it's hard to pick it up and continue striving to be the best. It's hard enough being the last born out of three. But Lily really does need to understan that her parents love them all the same. But in pure honesty, I really can relate.
And as for your author's note, I think you're doing the subject justice. Everything is portrayed acurately, and I give kudos to you for writing a powerful piece of fiction. Can't wait for the next chapter! Report Review
i don't like harry in this at all. like, he'd never say that to his daughter? Report Review
bloody hell she's really, really crazy. you can tell the rest of the story's going to be interesting! Report Review
wow this is haunting, i love it. Report Review
I love this story.
Keep it up. Report Review
Wow, this was...haunting. The arms on my hair is standing up, and I highly doubt it's because of the air-condition.
And again, another well written chapter. So many emotions, so many feelings. This story is like a little diary to me, because I feel as if I'm reading back to my own past. I admire you for that. I know this story isn't meant to be touching, but to me it is.
I'm anxious to see if Lily will get any better someday. In the back of my head, as I read, I kept silently telling myself that she will get better, that she had to, and that she had to fight it and stay strong.
I used to think like her. I really did. And I should hate this story for bringing back so many bitter memories, but I don't. I appreciate it and love it more than any other feeling right now.
I hope you update soon. I'm eager for another chapter, and this story all ready means so much to me.
(I apologize if I sound really weird) Report Review
I read your author's note, and I can't complain.
This is very different and original, and I love it. I can see my self as Lily here, I really do. Not too long ago, a few years back, I was going through the same thing, so I can relate to Lils. I honestly found myself crying because Lily reminded me so much of myself. Bless you for writing such a strong piece of writing!
This is by far the most emotionally wrecking story I've read, possibly because I can relate so much to it. It's like walking through memory lane.
Anyway, this was really good, and it's a change from a lot of the fic I've read. I'll just move on to chapter two now, and I've favorited, just to let you know. :) Report Review
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