The story is really good. Liking the character interactions, and Ginny being completely nutso atm. Big problem with the paragraphs though. Everything being squished together makes reading it hard. you need to work on seperating the lines better to make it more readable. Otherwise everything seems great. Can't wait for more.

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Write more!! It's so good! you have to write more desperately

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Its wonderful so far! I love it! Just as long as Harry and Hermione get together, I think I'll be okay. :)

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I like it! Not the type of story i usally read but keep up the good work. :)

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Sorry, but I just don't enjoy stories that pair Harry with anyone but Ginny and or Hermoine with anyone but Ron. I find the idea of Ginny with Draco exceptionally disgusting.

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You are off to a good start, however, I don't think Harry would have any doubts concerning his feelings for Ginny. She was the last thing he thought about before the killing curse in the forest and she is the main reason he came back! On to chapter 2! (editors note: it should be vane not vein)

Author's Response: I appreciate your feedback and thank you for the complement now I appreciate your accuracy to the HP series however i have changed my story so it is not going to be completely true to the series itself. thanx for the editors note i do spend quite a few hours checking and rechecking the grammar of my story but it is obviously very hard to get it perfect every time. Keep reading and i hope you can enjoy my story as much as i do writing it

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First of all I have to say I always get really excited about new post DH stories, they are my favorite.

So I really like where you're going so far, albeit its only the second chapter, but still. I also appreciate how you're going for a more emotional tone. A lot of stories don't get into, at least what I imagine, the emotional trauma of the past year and the war. So, thanks for that.
The only thing I would have to ask is to explain more of your characters' thoughts, that way it's easy to get in their heads and much more enjoyable to really get into the story.

Anyways, please keep writing!
~Kylie

Author's Response: I really appreciate your feedback, and im so glad that you have enjoyed my story so far. As far as explaining the thoughts of my chars i believe that in the upcoming chapters i have done just that. Now as you read along if you still believe that im not developing the thoughts then i will be sure to make some changes. Again i love your feedback and please keep it coming


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