I thought this was a really fun one-shot, and I really enjoyed reading it! You definitely captured the spirit of Fred and George, and this is something I could definitely see them doing! I wouldn't put it past them to single out the Ravenclaws either! And I loved how Hagrid was smiling as he gave them detention. He could never really be stern! This was a really great, funny read, and I really enjoyed it! 10/10
Cassie :)Author's Response: Hey there and sorry for the wait!
I'm glad you liked it and thought it was funny. I was aiming for that, seeing as it's Fred and George but I hadn't wrote anything with humour in it before so im glad you found it funny!
Thanks for the review and sorry again about the wait! :) Report Review
Hey it's Whiskey from the forums!
Well, first off, I noticed some typos:
"Defence against the dark arts" is supposed to be capitalized because it's, technically, a name. Same goes for "ravenclaw" and "Care formagical creatures"
"...before coming to his sense." Missing an 's' there
"chase the ravenclaw's," has an uneccesary apostrophe...
There are more such cases but I can't remember where they were in the text. It's no big deal and I'm just being nitpicky:P
As a die-hard Fred and George fan, I always look for deep character insight when reading about them, so I can get a bit tedious, don't mind me. But here are some questions that, if answered, might help liven up the story: 1) Was there any particular Ravenclaw that they wanted to prank? Why? 2) What do they think about Hagrid? 3) Allusions to the rest of their story? I.e. when is this, how does it relate to earlier or later events,etc.? My point is that some context could really brighten up this short! Good luck and keep writing about Fred and George, they rock so much :DAuthor's Response: Hey there and sorry about the wait!
Thanks for pointing them out, I'll go back through and see what I can spot! I'll also go back through and see what I can add to bulk out the story a bit more. It really isn't one of my longer peices and it would probally be better to add more information so thanks for the questions.
Thanks for the review and sorry again it's late! :) Report Review
Well, I thought that this was a rather good oneshot! Very interesting, and I loved the look into Fred and George misbehaving in class and I thought that their characterization was done very well! I thought that the prank was a great idea to spice up the class a bit and was so them! Hagrid was great as well especially when you mention that he tried to hide his smile as I can't imagine him being really upset with the two. I did spot a few spelling mistakes such as using there instead of their and for instead of from at one point in time but other than that, it was all really well done! Great Job and best of luck in the challenge.
~Slytherinchica08~Author's Response: Hey, thanks for your review! :)
I'm glad you liked it, this was the first time I'd attempted Fred and George so I'm glad I got some of there humour in there!
I'll have another look back through for the spelling and grammer mistakes, thanks! :) Report Review
Short and Sweet, but I like it :')
I recognised this from when you requested the banner on TDA, and I remember even then I thought the title sounded pretty cool :P
Apart from the odd spacings(I get them too) it was really well written and I found it rather funny - I can definitely imagine Fred and George doing that, and Hagrid, of course, would be slightly amused. (I dunno if he was teaching in their fourth year, but that's no matter.)
I loved it, s'all I have to say xD
-FallenAuthor's Response: Hey, glad you like the title, it took em ages to think of it! :D
I'll go back and see if I can fix the spacings, I had about of an issue with them but I think I can fix it.
I'm glad you enjoyed it and thanks for reviewing! :) Report Review
Hey! Thx for the entry!
I imagine having a class with Fred and George would be very entertaining and fun (of course if you're not their victims :D ). Oh those poor Ravenclaws.
I also like it at the end that Hagrid gave him detention but still found the situation funny.
As for what I was expecting from this challenge... well, I was actually looking for something a bit more original and challenging. A class with nifflers had already been told pretty detailed in the book, but there are lots of other magical creatures in the Potterverse that has never been explored.
But, with Fred and George being there, the story is still entertaining :D So, Good job!
Thanks once again for joining this challenge. I hope you had fun with it. You'll be hearing from me again soon.
GrayAuthor's Response: Hey, thanks for reviewing and can't wait to here from you again :) Report Review
Its alright but the layout needs adjusting :)Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing and i'll change the layout :) Report Review
Aw this was a nice story! I really liked the plot - I can definitely see Fred and George up to this sort of mischief! Sounds funny indeed, you got their characters right for sure :) One suggestion I do have is perhaps get a beta for this? There's a couple of spelling mistakes and some small things, and if they were fixed it could make this story even better than it is! And the formatting is a bit tough to work with, but if you fix up the spaces it'll be a lot less distracting to read ;)
All in all though, I really liked this. It was a nice story about the twins' humour, and nifflers and gold is always fun to read about! Nice writing~ :)Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it! :)
I'll try to fix the errors and formatting :) Report Review
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