Wow, I really have never imagined Aberforth with so many emotions. I think you have him pegged perfectly, so much of him doesn't want to become part of this, but that deep down sense of right and wrong, finally kicks in. He fights that urge the entire time, telling himself just to let it happen, pretending he doesn't care. You do a wonderful job of mixing his emotions. I also really like the way this is written, it's somewhat choppy, which is exactly how I think his thoughts would have been. he's focused on only himself for the most part, or trying to be, but he can't stop himself in the end from letting his true colors come through.
Ariana was the last straw he needed to right, and it was so perfect. Great job, this is wonderful!
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Hey! Debra20 here with your review.
First of all, let me praise you for your courage to tackle on a less known character. Less known, but still very important. Aberforth had been helping Harry and the others since long before we got to meet him in Deathly Hallows. It is a daring task and I must say you are on your right track.
I liked how you managed to portray his opposing feelings of what he should do and emotions. On one side, he wanted to prove everyone wrong, that he wasn't the "black sheep" of the Dumbledore family, but at the other time he only wanted to be left alone. And remain alive. A very nice idea to start the story gradually, with a few memories of his on how everything had progressed. How he started helping the Trio and suddenly found himself involved in the War he promised he wouldn't help.
It would have been interesting for you to focus maybe a bit more on what he felt. On his torment. Because in my own humble opinion, Aberforth was never a coward. Or at least, using the real sense of the word coward and not during the Second War. After he dragged Harry, Hermione and Ron inside the Hog's Head he went out and confronted the Death Eaters. To me, that takes a lot of guts. I think he was very troubled by his old memories and the consciousness that dictated him to help the Order. It would have been great if you could have focused a bit more on his change of mind maybe, rather than Ginny having an implication with his turn of decision. Of course, that is your decision and your story :)
I really loved reading something about him. It's my first story about Aberforth and I'm glad I had a chance to read yours first.Author's Response: Sorry for the late reply, but thank you so much!
Yes, I wanted to explore Aberforth's character. He always seemed interesting to me and I thought he should have gotten some more credit.
I don't think of Abe as a coward, per se. I tried to make him think he was a coward, though. He thinks all he wants is to survive for himself, but finally he realizes that that isn't him. He really can be brave.
Thanks for pointing that out! I'm glad to have some good CC.
Thank you for reviewing! And I'm honored to be your first Aberforth story ;) Report Review
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