You shouldn't hate this chapter, it's brilliant! The actual subject matter is so sad (I always like to believe that George could somehow move on) but you've written it really well. You've chosen a really interesting slant of George's emotions, I never really thought of him being resentful towards Harry, and the passage when he compares the lives of Fred and Harry.well, it's great writing! Please continue with this story, I am really enjoying it so far and can't wait to see what you write next!Author's Response: Oh, I've just seen this review and it's made my day! You've just totally inspired me to write the next chapter!! Thank you so so much! I'm doing NaNo this month, with exams and a holiday on top, but hopefully I'll squeeze in time to update soon enough! Report Review
love it!!! need the next one NOW Author's Response: BETH!!! Yay! I'm so glad you enjoyed it! Don't worry, you won't have to wait long, the nest chapter is in the queue! Report Review
It may have been a bit chessy, but in the best possible way. The whole exchange between Lavender and McGonagall seemed very real, from the way they were entirely different at the beginning to the realization that they were in fact similar. Lavender seemed especially well characterized in that a bit of her shallow, air headed self remained, but she was much more serious. It felt very real and very right.
You did a wonderful job with the first chapter and I personally think you made a great call in starting with two minor characters instead of the trio. It fits the story very well and seems perfect. Lovely story!Author's Response: Thank you so much for the lovely review, I really appreciate it! I'm glad you thought the charactersation was good!
I was actually originally going to use the trio to start us off, but it needed to be at King's Cross because of all of the symbolism and circles and sevens and new beginnings and all my little nerdy obsessions, and these two somehow ended up there. I just needed to start off this story in a way that echoed the beginning of the series, and it meant that McGonnagall had to be there in cat form!
Thanks for the review!
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B-b-but...this is too unfair.
WHY ARE YOU SO UNDESCRIBABLY AMAZING???
Livi, this was the most moving bit of writing I've read. I think what got me close to tears was the...innocence of it. Lavender and McGonagall- they both seemed so young and scared, with the weight of the entire world resting on their weary shoulders.
And the way they were characterised just added to it a whole lot mroe than you might realise- I felt like I was there too, on Kings Cross, the place it all started (I did pick that up, see! And I thought; that's just what Livi would do :P).
Wow, just amazing!
-Annon xxxAuthor's Response: Annon. You. Just. Made. A. Rubbish. Day. Amazing. And. Now. I. Need. To. Use. Too. Many. Full. Stops.
I can't believe it, I think you're finally beginning to share my love for symbolism!
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