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3 Reviews Found

Review #1, by DixieGirl Chapter Two

28th May 2012:
The no dialogue would normally make a story hard to follow and esentially unninteresting (oooh i sound so smart), but you have written this story beautifully, with so many details. Great job! Update soon!

Author's Response: Thank you so much and I promise that chapter three will be up shortly!

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Review #2, by CloakAuror9 Chapter One

25th May 2012:
Hey there! :)

I'll come clean with you, I don't read Dramione. I rarely do and its most of the time because someone requested a review for it and nothing more, but now your story has got me thinking; maybe Dramione isn't so bad after all...

Despite my lack of Dramione knowledge, I think this is a really great story and the lack of dialogues made it flow so smoothly. I just completely loved it. The whole clockwork thing was a very good idea! I thought you described everything so beautifully and it was just really fantastic.

Draco's chracterisation was really well done, I can just so imagine him sitting there in a corner intently watching Hermione doing things as he tries to figure her out.

Your story is so lovely! ♥ I can't believe I'm saying this, but I'm now looking forward to chapter two! :D

Ta,
CloakAuror9 xx
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Review #3, by ScorpiusRose17 Chapter One

21st May 2012:
Hi there!

I really like the way that your story starts off. I enjoyed actually reading something that doesn't have dialogue in it. It's totally different from what I've ever read before. I also liked how you kept the identities of the characters quiet. I thought it built the intrigue of the story really well. Now I am anxious to know what happens next.

I also thought that for not having dialogue that the story flowed really well and had a nice pace. The one thing that I would say for constructive criticism is that you were alitte redundent in the 2nd paragraph and the 4th paragraph using the word minute so much kind of threw me off. Maybe it is just me I don't know, but I thought I would mention it. It doesn't take away from the chapter, but it did stand out to me.

Overall, I thought that you did a great job bringing this to life and holding the mystery of the story together. I also really enjoyed reading it without dialogue. It is very inspirational.

Keep up the awesome writing! =)

-SR17

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Author's Response: Holy Crap I didn't expect such a fast review. But then again, today is the 22nd, huh..Anyways! Thank you so much for the review!

I like to reiterate some words to make them poignant and emphasize them for sake of the story since I want this to kind of be about clockwork, the description being that theyre two clocks ticking the same time even though their characters that are worlds apart and it'd be like the time in New Zealand to the time in America where they're completely different but in reality they're both in teh same timezone. I don't know if that makes sense. But I agree that I may have gone a little over board with the word and I'll be sure to comb through with the next chapters that I don't do the same thing.

It was so much fun writing no dialogue and I might do it again when I finish this story. I almost accidentally slipped in dialogue and then had to go back and completely change it...oops. Next Chapter should be up shortly. Most if it's beta'd except I added to it so I just have to make sure that it all flows and such.

Again, Thanks!

Just A Simple Girls World


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