wow. that was absolutely amazing.
"Like his son, he was an aristocratic porcelain, with a slight upturn to his nose, and the remnants of his shaved beard would always be reappearing by the time he rode past Merope’s house in the afternoon. Another thing about him that beguiled her was his clothes; he had the air of a regency dandy, but dressed like a twenties playboy. He had an old pocket watch, which hung from his lapel; it was the size of the locket Merope wore around her own neck. She had loved him on sight."- this was probably my favorite part. seriously, i'm in love with your writing!
-MAuthor's Response: Thank you so much! I know I can sometimes rush through descriptive passages, so with this one-shot I was hoping to develop my descriptive writing. I have a different aim with each story! I can't believe you are working your way through all my stories! I hope you keep reading! Report Review
How do you do it? This is fantastic! This is so sad for Merope, but at the same time she deserves it. I did tear up a bit; this is just so REAL.
I completely felt for Merope and the flashbacks are brilliant. I like how it switches between to two times, the two Toms.
I think you portray Merope and Tom and even Mrs. Cole perfectly. Add that with you Andromeda, and I would guess you portray ALL characters well.Author's Response: Thank you so much for your lovely supportive reviews! I suppose my aim at the moment is to develop how I write characters, because plots usually come easy to my head but sometimes I create 2-D characters. I love taking characters not usually tackled (I don't want to do a Draco/Hermione story or a James/Lily story because their characters are just so solid). In many ways Merope and Andromeda are quite similar, sad characters wanting something they can't have. Thank you for your lovely reviews, and I hope you keep reading my stories! Report Review
Wonderfully written. You did a great job with Merope's character and handling the entire Tom Riddle love potion incident. Spot-on how I've always pictured those scenes happening. Good job :)Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing! I've always wanted to write a Tom/Merope story but could never get it quite right! Thanks for reviewing! (I love your stories as well by the way) lol! Report Review
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