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Review #1, by Navera St. Mungo's and Meeting Wayne Hopkins

17th June 2013:
Hey! This is a good story so far! I can't wait to read more! One thing: I wish your chapters were longer!

Author's Response: I'll try to make them a little longer, i've been stuck in a writers block for about two months now and it really sux. -_- hopefully i'll be released from it soon!!

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Review #2, by EnchantedGhost One Trip, Two Strangers, and Three New Friends

18th July 2012:
New guy, shy girl, potential couple :P You should watch out for punctuation ;)
Keep up the good work :D

Author's Response: *potential* haha thanks!!

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Review #3, by charlottetrips One Trip, Two Strangers, and Three New Friends

18th July 2012:
Ah, High School, even if itís Hogwarts. Boy crazy, friends who may or may not be friendsÖnot something I really miss :P

Carter sounds pretty interesting! I like the back story youíve given us though I couldíve stood to have more of it drug out. Having parents from different countries meeting in a completely random country and having their magical children but then also getting divorced. Kind of seems like the story of the century, eh? Unfortunately. I like seeing families that stay together but I guess having separate and more families like that can be interesting.

Carter seems to be such a little sarcastic thing to be so unknown and invisible. I like that she struck up a conversation with a random stranger (who has mysterious powers it seems) and then gets into it with the other friends she has there.

You write dialogue pretty well. I would concentrate on descriptions as well. Also, I think itís pretty brave to tackle a story with mainly OCs. Itís basically like writing original fiction while just borrowing someone elseís universe, right? There were a lot of new people that you introduced to us, so make sure that you make them all flesh-and-blood people to us by giving us some back stories and relationships and thoughts/feelings from them and I think this storyíll do fine. :)

xChar

P.S. Also something seems off with the formatting as you've got a white background. Not sure what causes that.

Author's Response: Thanks so much!! I'm currently writing the next chapter which really introduces everyone. and the formatting was kinda screwed up but i fixed it. technology these days.


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