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Review #1, by Rainystrawberry12 Honey on Toast

28th October 2012:
This is a really really good story, I can't wait to read more. PLEASE PLEASE WRITE MORE!

Author's Response: Thank you so much, I definitely will! Thank you for reading so far!

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Review #2, by UnluckyStar57 Honey on Toast

29th May 2012:
I love how you painted Diagon Alley in vibrant colors! Usually, I imagine it as a bleak, grey sort of place, but the colors brought it to life!!
A note: The flashbacks were a nice insight on the character of Rose and her dislike for Scorpius, but they were a little bit confusing. Maybe add a few words of transition before and after they occur?
Otherwise, this is a strong start to the story, and I look forward to the update!!

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Review #3, by Rae Honey on Toast

9th May 2012:
Great first chapter! Really interested to see scorps pov or just more about him! Xx

Author's Response: Thank you! I' have been thinking about doing a Scorp POV, because i really love the character. I guess it will be a surprise!

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Review #4, by Brittanique Honey on Toast

8th May 2012:
Well done. This is an excellent first chapter. I really like the way you write in first person. There were one or two grammatical errors (I think it was just confusing 'there' for 'their' once or twice) but nothing too serious.

I cannot wait until the next chapter comes out, you've got the potential to make this into a great story.

Keep up the good work.
Brittanique

Author's Response: Thank you so much!

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Review #5, by Miss Muggle Honey on Toast

8th May 2012:
For some reason the chairs stood out to me most. I love how they are all unique, individual. Maybe representative of each person's personality?

There are some typos, however. Nothing really disruptive, but little things. "Sense" instead of "since" for example. Also, I noticed you switched from past tense to future tense and back a few times.

The chapter is a good first chapter. It sets everything up wonderfully. The two main facts: Rose hates Scorpius and she's eager to become a Healer.

Author's Response: Thanks! that was what i was going for with the chairs!

And yea, I read over the story just now and noticed typos too :( that's what you get for typing at 1am I suppose.


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