It's Rosie with your requested review! :)
Yay, ScoRose! One of my favorite ships because it's like Dramione but it can actually be canon! :D And don't worry about it being too fluffy, fluffy is good.
One thing I noticed at the beginning of the story was that I didn't know who was talking/thinking. At first I guessed it was Scorpius, only to realize it was Rose after Scorpius started talking to her. Maybe you could have added some description like: "I walked to the library, my red hair flowing behind me" or something like that, so that the reader knows it's from Rose's PoV.
Another thing that sort of distracted me in the story was that you would use "I am" or "it is" too much. Maybe you could use "I'm" or "it's" instead, because otherwise it sounds too proper.
But overall, this was a wonderful, cute one-shot. I love how it was simple and just so fluffy and romantic. No plot whatsoever but wonderful all the same. I was smiling while reading it, and I really loved it. Good job! :)
~Rosie Report Review
OH MY GOSH! THAT WAS THE SWEETEST THING I HAVE EVER READ IN AGES! YOU GENIUS! THAT WAS SO CUTE! I'M MELTING!
I have a very big grin from ear to ear because of this story. It made my day from good to wonderful! This was just soo cute! I can't imagine anyone not grinning from ear to ear or at least smiling after they've read the story.
I love your characterisation of Rose, especially when she took all of her family and people's criticism really calmly. Usually, she would be all 'Well, in my opinion...blah, blah' to try and defend herself, and as much as I know that everyone does that, I personally think that its a bit overrated. Rose in your story was soo refreshing!
And then there's Scorpius who's two years older than 'Rosebud'! Ain't he the sweetest? After your story, I'm fully convinced that Scorpius Malfoy if the right one for me! ♥
Yours story was just so lovely! I love the way you didn't include too many negative things in it, like Rose worrying about this and that or the two of them having a big argument in the library. It was just a simple story of young love and it was absolutely amazing!
It might be too fluffy for you, but it its not for me! At least, now I have a story to cheer me up when bad days come!
Has anyone ever told you how amazing you are? Because you really really really are. ♥
Izzy xx Report Review
This was too cute. I thought this was just cute. cute, cute, cute, cute, cute like a bunny rabbit. I thought this was adorable. Good job, and I love the banner!
LizzieAuthor's Response: Aww thank you so much! I never write this kind of fluff, so I had no idea what to make of it. :D Report Review
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