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I really enjoyed the chapter! I thought that you did a great job with exploring things from Lily's POV. It was nice to see and to read. I usually don't read very much about her so this was fun.
I liked the way that you characterized her. It was exactly the way I would picture her in my mind. She is so determined to do anything and everything that she is just like her parents. I also thought that you did a great job with the use of subtle description to make the story flow and paint a picture in the readers minds.
Keep up the awesome work! =)
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Aww I like this one, I'm really interested to know where you're going with it all (hint hint), get your chapters up soon! (: Report Review
Hey! I like the idea of this story, but it could definitely use a proof read -- I just found a couple of spelling mistakes, and the grammar could use some work as well. For example, one thing you might want to change is that in the description it should be "not even smiles" as opposed to smile. And also at one point, you say clam instead of calm. But I do think that your ideas are really good, so I can't wait to keep reading! I love the way that you state the fact at the beginning of the chapter! I think that it makes it kind of fun and light hearted. Nice job!Author's Response: Hey! I am giving you cyber cookies right now for liking my story;)..Typos? I hate them but who likes, anyways..I changed them! Thanks for reading and liking..:) Report Review
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