Can you please write more :) :) :) :) :)Author's Response: I am! I have 2 novels on the go! Go take a look at those! Called Roommates and Family, Love, School. Oh and Quidditch. Report Review
Its really great 😊 I Love it 😃Author's Response: Thanks alot, always good to hear someone likes my story. Report Review
Hi! You're tagged!!
I found this hilarious, to be honest. Having gone through that just this past week, I can say that my boyfriend took it really well! At least he didn't faint!!
For a first one-shot, I found it was well done. You really did a good job with the descriptions and the characters. Blake is an interesting OC and I really liked him; he is engaging and seems like a really good guy.
One little thing bothered me in the middle of the story though. For some reason, you suddently changed your point of view from first person to third person. Here is the sentence :
"I was late for dinner especially when I promised to be there, tonight of all nights, our third anniversary. Apparating into entrance hall of their flat, Blake shrugged off his jacket and flipped off his shoes. “Molls, I’m home!” "
Change that second sentence's perception and the story will flow very nicely. Great work, I enjoyed it a lot!Author's Response: Aghh! I had not noticed that! Thanks! Report Review
Hey! Wow, I really liked your OC, Blake! =) Al's right, he actually is a softie. And Al's got a nice sense of humor! The fainting parts were hilarious! I was laughing like crazy! Even though your story is short it's funny! I really liked how you managed to write such an interesting piece in one shot; you did a good
~Recenseo '12Author's Response: Thanks alot, I've always been told one of the things Im best at is humour. Again thanks for the review! (Sorry it took so long, finally decided I needed to get to all my unanswered reviews!) Report Review
i like this idea! the fainting parts made m laugh! um i'll try check out ur other story soon!Author's Response: Thanks alot, any reviews help! (Sorry it took so long, IM just getting to reviews now! haha) Report Review
Oh I just love this! The fainting is so funny :) I like your OC. And the other characters, though they aren't in it too much. The story is very good!!!Author's Response: Thanks alot! If you want to read more into the others, go check on the novel length story with them. :) (Finally answering all my reviews, sorry it was so long!) Report Review
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