Hi!

That as such an enjoyable read! This story is a lot of fun and I really enjoyed it from beginning to end!

First of all, your characterization of James is brilliant. I absolutly love him; the way he thinks, acts and speak make him a great character, well rounded even if this is just a one-shot. You managed to show that beneath the mischief, there is heart and loyalty and that is a great feat.

The plan in itself was childish and stupid, like most thing 12 years olds will come up with and that's what made it great. It wasn't an elaborated thing, just a spur of the moment.

Personally, I think the ending part (with the punishment and bringing the mother (which didn't seem all that needed by the way) ) it took a little too long for my liking. You could definitly shorten it and keep it going with a second chapter if you want to continue it. A sequel would be great for sure considering you have great characters and already a plan (Al's revenge) but all in all, if you want to keep it a one-shot, it is still great as it is.

Great work and HAPPY BIRTHDAY fellow Gryffie! Yes, this is your birthday review and you have no idea how happy I got you; I really discovered a great story and a new author (I don't think I've ever read of your work before). I enjoy your writting style a lot :) Good day!

Akussa

Author's Response: Hello!

Thank you so much. I actually didn't come up with the plan, I grabbed it from the Up For Grabs section, it was moonyxluna's idea actually.

As for the ending, I just could not get the ending to fit how I liked! I'll probably go back and edit it again one of these days... Strangely, it's a hard ending for me to write.

Thank you so much!

~Sara

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aw sweet but kind of rushed...i would love to see a sequel that expanded on the story.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I'm thinking of writing a sequel, but I have a different Next-Gen planned right now.

~Sara

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Oohh... Such an entertaining read...
Hats off to Moonyxluna for the brilliant plot and to you for translating it into the screen :D

I was reading the Up for Grab section, saw this plot and fell in love with it. I think it's very hilarious, and thus see if it has been snagged or not. If not, I would love to try it myself... And I'm glad that you have already taken it. Funny thing is: I have the same idea (making the Sorting Hat really place Albus in Slytherin) popped into my head :D :D :D And having read this story, I don't think I would be able to pull it off as nicely as you...
You've really done a great job! Thanks for cheering up my night with this story :D

Author's Response: Ooooh, thank you! I'm glad you like it :D

Well, moonyxluna did the work. I just made the story to go along with it :) I'm glad it was good!

Thanks for the review!

~Sara

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This was hilarious! Everything about this♥♥

Oh James, your little plan backfired so beautifully. I laughed every time he said 'hatty'. At first I thought the hat was just messing with James back, like he was going to call it at the end or something, but I loved the way you ended it. I didn't even think of this to keep Al in Slytherin, but it's perfect! I loved how you wrote him. He was still at that immature age and at the end to have Professor McGonagall want him to help the other students in order to have him grow up was really sweet.

I could just feel the glares McGonagall was shooting at James the whole time, she was very in character and that was lovely to see! My favorite part was when she sent Fred to bring 'his cousin' and at the last minute called 'Albus'-- I could totally see Fred bringing every cousin :p

Ah, Albus. I felt so bad for him watching him slump off to Slytherin. But after he found out he got that little bit of hope and I felt even worse seeing him all sad again! But he seemed to accept it at the thought of revenge on James.

This was such a lovely surprise to hear this got used! It was a million times better than I could have ever done it justice so I'm so glad you got some use out of it! Thanks so much for letting me know, I loved reading it!

Author's Response: :) Yay! I'm glad you liked it :D
I'm not the best at writing humor...so I'm glad you thought it was funny! I'm glad I did it justice :)

~Sara

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Haha, this is hilarious!

I do think it dragged on towards the end, though. The action was over, but the characters kept talking about Slytherin and punishments for too long.

I do love how Al really was put in Slytherin :) And how James kept his promise to the Sorting Hat/Hatty. This is very well written, I think :D

Author's Response: Aww, thank you! Yeah, I'm not the best at endings...hehe. I'll try to edit that...if I ever have time. :D Thanks for the review!

~Sara

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