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Review #1, by Lululuna The Plan

1st March 2014:
Hello! :)

Hahaha, this story just brightened up my day. I love how you've written about twelve-year old James and he fits the character from the Epilogue so perfectly! I can entirely see this being what happens after the train ride at the end of DH. You captured him perfectly - how silly and reckless he is, how goofy he is though he does seem a little scared of his mother, and how he's actually quite creative and clever underneath it all.

I also loved Ginny - okay, I loved all the canon characters, I'll just say it. :P Ginny was the perfect mix of terrifying and understanding. Having grown up with Fred and George I like to think she would have some appreciation for a good prank. :P Also, I really liked Albus and how he was quite timid and terrified at the beginning, but as he embraced his Slytherin identity he came out of his shell and promised some cunning revenge on James. Which James definitely deserves! :P

The Sorting Hat (forever to be known as Hatty now) was fantastic as well. I loved how righteous yet sassy he was, and how excited he was to be washed. And ew, never being washed for a thousand years... if Hogwarts ever has a lice outbreak, we know who to blame. I laughed out loud about the comment about Hatty's morals, hehe.

The prank was actually pretty genius! I was quite impressed with James and with you for writing it so well! It is really awful, but also really hilarious, and all the more ironic that Albus did belong in Slytherin and that the joke ended up being on James.

I feel quite sorry for McGonagall having to deal with James for the next six years. Since he knows the password to her office, I wonder what other mischief he could get up to? Speaking of, ending the story with James going to wash poor Hatty was the perfect ending.

This was such an adorable and hilarious little story, I loved it! :) You wrote it really wonderfully. :D

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Author's Response: Hello! Thanks for reading and reviewing! Having never been a 12 year old boy, it was a bit difficult to get in his mindset, but I'm glad you think I pulled it off okay! Ah, yes, Hatty definitely deserves to be a sassy hat. I'm glad you liked the ending- James may be a prankster, but he sticks to his word. Thanks for reading and reviewing, and I'm glad you enjoyed it!
~Sara


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Review #2, by Your Secret Santa again! The Plan

20th December 2013:
We meet again, Sara! As Christmas time approaches, I start to get busier and busier... I hope you're enjoying your reviews so far!

This story was fabulous, honestly. It was so funny, and just so sweet. You really have a talent for writing next gens, especially Potters.

The way you wrote James was fabulous. He's such a girl :P His immature and childdish self was done so well, and I am always so envious of authors who can write Children so flawlessly! And that's what you did!

The plan was such a cool idea, and it was really funny to see it unravel. This piece was really unique.

Anyway, I hope you enjoy your day and have a great holiday...

Author's Response: Hi! Thank you- I always somehow slip the Potter kids into my stories- even when they aren't the main characters, they end up being pretty darn close to it. Haha, it's easier to write children when I've recently been around my family- I'm always the one that is looking after the little kids.

Thank you!


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Review #3, by Akussa The Plan

14th October 2012:
Hi!

That as such an enjoyable read! This story is a lot of fun and I really enjoyed it from beginning to end!

First of all, your characterization of James is brilliant. I absolutly love him; the way he thinks, acts and speak make him a great character, well rounded even if this is just a one-shot. You managed to show that beneath the mischief, there is heart and loyalty and that is a great feat.

The plan in itself was childish and stupid, like most thing 12 years olds will come up with and that's what made it great. It wasn't an elaborated thing, just a spur of the moment.

Personally, I think the ending part (with the punishment and bringing the mother (which didn't seem all that needed by the way) ) it took a little too long for my liking. You could definitly shorten it and keep it going with a second chapter if you want to continue it. A sequel would be great for sure considering you have great characters and already a plan (Al's revenge) but all in all, if you want to keep it a one-shot, it is still great as it is.

Great work and HAPPY BIRTHDAY fellow Gryffie! Yes, this is your birthday review and you have no idea how happy I got you; I really discovered a great story and a new author (I don't think I've ever read of your work before). I enjoy your writting style a lot :) Good day!

Akussa

Author's Response: Hello!

Thank you so much. I actually didn't come up with the plan, I grabbed it from the Up For Grabs section, it was moonyxluna's idea actually.

As for the ending, I just could not get the ending to fit how I liked! I'll probably go back and edit it again one of these days... Strangely, it's a hard ending for me to write.

Thank you so much!

~Sara


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Review #4, by relic The Plan

23rd May 2012:
aw sweet but kind of rushed...i would love to see a sequel that expanded on the story.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I'm thinking of writing a sequel, but I have a different Next-Gen planned right now.

~Sara


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Review #5, by Gray Raven The Plan

12th May 2012:
Oohh... Such an entertaining read...
Hats off to Moonyxluna for the brilliant plot and to you for translating it into the screen :D

I was reading the Up for Grab section, saw this plot and fell in love with it. I think it's very hilarious, and thus see if it has been snagged or not. If not, I would love to try it myself... And I'm glad that you have already taken it. Funny thing is: I have the same idea (making the Sorting Hat really place Albus in Slytherin) popped into my head :D :D :D And having read this story, I don't think I would be able to pull it off as nicely as you...
You've really done a great job! Thanks for cheering up my night with this story :D

Author's Response: Ooooh, thank you! I'm glad you like it :D

Well, moonyxluna did the work. I just made the story to go along with it :) I'm glad it was good!

Thanks for the review!

~Sara


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Review #6, by Moonyxluna The Plan

6th May 2012:
This was hilarious! Everything about this♥♥

Oh James, your little plan backfired so beautifully. I laughed every time he said 'hatty'. At first I thought the hat was just messing with James back, like he was going to call it at the end or something, but I loved the way you ended it. I didn't even think of this to keep Al in Slytherin, but it's perfect! I loved how you wrote him. He was still at that immature age and at the end to have Professor McGonagall want him to help the other students in order to have him grow up was really sweet.

I could just feel the glares McGonagall was shooting at James the whole time, she was very in character and that was lovely to see! My favorite part was when she sent Fred to bring 'his cousin' and at the last minute called 'Albus'-- I could totally see Fred bringing every cousin :p

Ah, Albus. I felt so bad for him watching him slump off to Slytherin. But after he found out he got that little bit of hope and I felt even worse seeing him all sad again! But he seemed to accept it at the thought of revenge on James.

This was such a lovely surprise to hear this got used! It was a million times better than I could have ever done it justice so I'm so glad you got some use out of it! Thanks so much for letting me know, I loved reading it!

Author's Response: :) Yay! I'm glad you liked it :D
I'm not the best at writing humor...so I'm glad you thought it was funny! I'm glad I did it justice :)

~Sara


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Review #7, by Miss Muggle The Plan

3rd May 2012:
Haha, this is hilarious!

I do think it dragged on towards the end, though. The action was over, but the characters kept talking about Slytherin and punishments for too long.

I do love how Al really was put in Slytherin :) And how James kept his promise to the Sorting Hat/Hatty. This is very well written, I think :D

Author's Response: Aww, thank you! Yeah, I'm not the best at endings...hehe. I'll try to edit that...if I ever have time. :D Thanks for the review!

~Sara


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