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Review #1, by Memmzy Unexpected... or was it?

15th April 2014:
This sucks have you even read the books or watched the movie this is ridicules you can guess how mad I am I look for decent book about Harry potter and I get this if you think this is quality work you are so wrong and excuse me but you better read the books or watch the movies again or for the first time and rewrite a lot of it because those people that commented I don't know if it was good or bad but if it was good then they need to go to a mental hospital or something because they had to be lying through there teeth because you need to get an update boy or girl and I don't know if you meant to do that but.I'm sorry if I offended you in any way I just have to state my option I'm also sorry for my eyes and brain for having to read that again just my option others might think differently than me and one more thing I'm sorry for my spelling not very good at it:( hate your writing Memmzy oh P.S this is for the whole book P.P.S Harry goes to Gyffindor not slytherin!!! I'd rate 0 if I could

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing, I guess, but I just want to clarify that this story is a NEXT GENERATION and it's about Katie Boot, who I made up. It's not about Harry. At. All. I have mentioned Harry's son, Albus, who befriends Katie and I chose to put him in Slytherin because personally I'm in Slytherin and I dont think Slytherin's are evil, I put Albus in there because he wants to prove himself, to not only be known for his father's fame, but also for something that everyone says "That's Albus Potter" not "That's Harry Potter's son, Ablus." .. if that makes sense. I also think that Harry would be supportive of his son being in Slytherin because he's a loving person and he supports his children. Also in the chaper "Nineteen Years Later" Albus says "What if I'm in Slytherin?' The whisper was for his father alone, and Harry knew that only the moment of departure could have forced Albus to reveal how great and sincere that fear was. Harry crouched down so that Albus's face was slightly above his own. Alone of Harry's three children, Albus has inherited Lily's eyes. 'Albus Severus,' Harry said quietly, so that nobody but Ginny could hear, and she was tactful enough to pretend to be waving to Rose, who was now on the train, 'you were names for two headmasters of Hogwarts. One of them was a Slytherin and he was probably the bravest man I ever knew.' 'But just say-' '-then Slytherin house will have gained an excellent student, won't it? It doesn't matter to us, Al." and it goes on. But yeah, so that kinda proves that Harry would have been supportive.
And also this is a FAN FICTION which means I can make it up. I have read heaps of them where Albus has been put in Slytherin and J.K. Rowling herself said that she isn't sure whether Albus would be sorted into Gryffindor or Slytherin, so I chose to put him there.
I have read the books MANY times and seen the movies MANY times. But this is a scenario that COULD have happened when Harry's kids go to Hogwarts, that's the point of a fan fiction.
But thanks for reviewing, it's nice to know that another person in this world hates me.

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Review #2, by MargaretLane Chapter One. 6 Years Later

9th October 2013:
In your first sentence there should be a comma at the end of the dialogue, not a full stop and the word "was" should have a small "w", as it's all one sentence.

I'd also be inclined to go onto a new paragraph when she opens her eyes. Dialogue usually stands alone.

*laughs* I like the way you characterise both sisters in the paragraph saying what a typical Ravenclaw Jasmine is. Not only does it tell us what kind of person Jasmine is; it also gives us a good impression of what kind of person Katie is, as she clearly DOESN'T enjoy reading and studying. Actually, they remind me a little of me and my younger sister and my sister's incredulous comment when I came home from college one weekend and started talking about some book on Dev or the 1916 Rising or something I'd found in the college library. "You read History for FUN?" She sounded utterly appalled.

Really like the details you give about everything the family is doing when she comes down that morning.

You also have us wondering who everybody is. I thought firstly that maybe the father'd remarried and Lindy was his new wife, but then you mentioned Karen and I thought maybe SHE was his new wife. Looking forward to finding out who all these people are.

The Daily Prophet should have a capital "D" and "P" and should probably be in italics, as it's a title.

You seem to have lost somebody. Did somebody stay home? There were six people mentioned: the father, Lindy, Karen, Katie, Jasmine and Georgia. Then you said two adults and three children got into the car, which only makes five people.

"She realised she was beaten" should be a separate sentence from what she said.

I like the way she gets Hugo's name wrong. It makes sense and people making mistakes like that happens far less often in fiction than in real life. It makes your story realistic.

Like the way Al is the more reasonable one and Rose is the one to jump to conclusions in your story. It usually seems to be the other way about, and this way does make sense as Ron is likely to be more vocal about Malfoy than Harry and Ginny, understandably, since Malfoy nearly killed Ron; he kind of has the right not to be reasonable about somebody almost murdering him.

By the way, it should be "he's a little Death Eater, not "his," since it's short for "he is".

Author's Response: Again thanks for reviewing! You're my favorite aha and thanks for correcting my grammar. I'm not too good at it :)
Yeah, with the characterization I was trying to show how different Katie and Jasmine were. So I guess it worked. I have the same thing as you and your sister with my older brother, he's into politics and stuff and always watches Question Time and I'm like WHY?!
Lindy is his new wife and Karen is the house maid. I tried to make that clear, but I guess not... I'll fix that up, thanks :) so yeah, that meant that Karen stayed behind at the house.
Thank you again! It's really great to know that you like it! And it's encouraging to hear your reviews! :D

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Review #3, by MargaretLane Prologue

9th October 2013:
Love the language of the first two paragraphs. Good use of imagery.

You have also managed to give us the impression of what is going on, while still keeping us in suspense as to the details. I am guessing his wife is dying and he will have to raise his daughters alone, but exactly what's happened to her is still a mystery.

One mistake I've noticed. You've misspelled "coma" as "comer". Unless you're trying to show us the doctor's accent.

Hmm, I wonder what he means by he suffered enough in the past. He's probably just referring to living through the war and the abuse perpetrated his last year at Hogwarts, but there could be more to it.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing! Much appreciated! (especially your corrections)
You've also given me more to think about and build on :)
thanks again!

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