Haha, this was awesome! Thanks for entering the challenge and I'm very sorry I haven't read this sooner.
Wow. This was hilarious. The way Bill kept yelling at his kids halfway through... and the last two lines made me crack up so much that my mother now thinks I'm a psychopath. Oh well; she raised me.
There wasn't any punctuation or grammatical errors that I noticed except that it might have been better with quotation marks and maybe a few less sets of brackets. Most other stories I read are full of mistakes, so I'm heaps glad to see this. I loved the storyline and how it was just him and his kids, and the Teddy references in there were cute too.
Fantabulous job and I will write a blog with the winners in it, so look out for it. I only have one other fic to read so it will probably be up tomorrow or something.
~dobby~Author's Response: Well, I take it that you liked it - and for that I am totally thrilled. What author wouldn't want someone cracking up at their story (Mothers are just like that sometimes - I can totally relate, because mine does that too...maybe it's a fandom thing?)
Yeah...I always look into beta-ing things later on, and I was kinda in a rush to get this one even completed. I'll definitely look into the brackets and quotation marks thing though - so thank's for the suggestion.
Thanks so much for the challenge - and I'm glad you enjoyed reading it! Report Review
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