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Review #1, by UnluckyStar57 Blank

4th January 2014:
Hello! I'm here for the Ninth Day of the Twelve Days of Reviewing.

I listened to the podcast as I read along, and it was really cool to have a voice to put with the story. This piece is written in a very interesting format--I really like the italicized words at the beginning of each little paragraph. They helped emphasize what was going on in the character's head at that very moment.

Who are the characters, by the way? Was I supposed to know and I was just too silly to pick up on it? Do the characters even have names? If not, that's fine. It just makes their situation somewhat universal. The Death Eaters targeted many families, and the way I see this story, it's as if the two characters represent the innocent people who died because of Voldemort's reign of terror.

This was an awesome story! :D


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Review #2, by BookDinosaur Blank

4th January 2014:
Hello! I'm here for the Ninth of the Twelve Days of Reviewing Challenge over at the forums. :)

Wow. Just wow. I don't even know how I'm going to form any coherant thoughts at all about this, because this just blew my mind.

I really enjoyed reading this, I think it really does display the horror of war and death. I love how you left your main characters unnamed, leaving them ambiguous shows us how this could really be anyone, anyone at all, that's how brutal and impersonal war is.

I really enjoyed the italicised words at the beginning of each paragraph, I think those really helped us to get the gist of the piece and help you convey emotions. Everything here was so emotional and just gah. This was such an emotional piece, I can't cope. The emotions were so vivid!

Your descriptions here were fantastic, the imagery was amazing, I could really see everything that was happening as it unfolded on the page.

The whole thing flowed really well, and since you actually have italicesed words at the start of very paragraph chopping it up, that's quite a feat! :P But you've really done a fantastic job with this, nothing seemed clunky or forced or out of place and I loved reading this.

All in all, I think this was a fantastic piece, I really enjoyed reading it and I'm so glad I had the chance to! :D

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Review #3, by Myrealeviltwin Blank

30th April 2012:
I enjoyed the style of the one-shot it was cool. The imagary is so realistic i can see and feel everything that's going around. Great job

Author's Response: Thanks so much for reviewing!!!

I really wanted to create something that was purely emotions. I usually write dialogue heavy stories, so I wanted to push myself a bit. Glad it worked.


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Review #4, by Siriusly3 Blank

27th April 2012:
Oh wow, so beautiful and emotional and wow. Not knowing who the characters are makes it so much more, painful? It's so well flowing and the words and the beginning of the paragraphs are beautiful. Wow, it's amazing!

Author's Response: Thanks so much for this review!

'Wow' that's all my sister could say when she read this. I'm so glad you liked it.

I don't know why I choose for the characters to remain anonymous, but it just felt right.

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Review #5, by alicia and anne Blank

27th April 2012:
Wow, that was immense. Such beautiful description and it read so well. I wonder who they are? I really enjoyed this :-D

Author's Response: Thanks so much for this review!!!

I purposefully wrote this with ambiguous characters in the hope that you could imagine any two people in this situation and it would still be enjoyable.


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Review #6, by Ronsgirl29 Blank

26th April 2012:

The style of this was amazing. I loved the pattern of the words that stood out every little paragraph. I liked that even though as a reader I don't know who the characters are, I can really understand what they are feeling. The emotions were so vivid! Did you have any characters in mind when you wrote this, or was it just meant to be nameless people?

Great oneshot

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing!!!

Thanks! I think I might have copied this style from somewhere, like I feel like I've read a story similar to the way this is structured. But I have no idea.

That was exactly what I was going for!! The nameless faceless characters make it easier (I think) to have that emotional connection. These characters can literally be ANYONE. I intended this story to have interchangeable. You, the reader, could put any two characters into this and it would still work. You could have them be anywhere during any time period. I literally left it wide open.

I wanted to write a piece that was mostly emotion. Because I write a lot of dialogue based stuff and I wanted to push myself to do something a little out of the box.

I'm so glad you liked it and reviewed!!!


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Review #7, by BoOkWoRm24 Blank

26th April 2012:
I really liked this little one shot a lot. Specifically how you've organized it with the italicized word to begin each paragraph. I felt like it was the italics that really drove the message home. I also like how you don't tell us who the characters are. They could be anyone from an OC to some cannon characters. But not knowing completed the overall feel of the story. I didn't see any grammar or spelling mistakes either so thats good. I would recomend that you fix the spacing a little. Stories just look more apppealing when there isn't a huge gap between each paragraph. Any way this was great, keep up the good work.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing!!!

I don't know where the idea for the italicized words came from. I feel like I've read something else that was a similar style, but I'm not sure. I"m glad it works!!!

I wanted to keep a lot of this ambiguous. The characters especially. I wanted you to be able to imagine whichever characters YOU wanted in this. I also didn't want to bother with characterization and too much physical description. I wanted this to be more emotions driven, that's why there isn't any dialogue.

I tried so many times to fix the spacing. I don't know what it is but every time I copy and paste my story into the editor it adds a lot of space and I take the spaces out and they just show back up again. :/ I'll have to ask around and see if there is a way to fix that. Hopefully it's just me being technically challenged and it's just something simple I'm doing wrong.

Thanks so so so much for reviewing.


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