I like it so far. You're a very good writer and you have the ability to describe James' emotions from a thrid person point of view which I find very impressive since I've never been able to do it well. I also really enjoy that you stay close to what the books described both James and Lily as which is nice since a lot of James/Lily fics depict Lily as a horribly mean person. I really like how you portrait both of them as really likeable people. I can't wait for the next chapter :)Author's Response: Thank you, you're so sweet! aha I'm glad you think so and i totally understand what you mean when you say that other people write Lily and James completely differently to how you imagined them to be! I always get annoyed when people portray Lily as the most popular girl at Hogwarts who is really loud and confident, because if anything, in my mind i always imagined her to be the opposite...sorry for my little rant there!
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Interesting. I think some of the best stories are when you write about what you know. A word of caution, though. Talking too much about psychology, especially when the people reading don't know understand what you are talking about, might push people away. Like that line about if he saw the glass when it fell? Yeah, I took PSY 101, so I'm gonna pretend I know what that means, but I have no clue. Look for a happy medium, okay?
Anyways, looking forward for the next chapter! Update soon!
TheKikGeekAuthor's Response: Thank you so much for the review! Also, thank you for being honest and giving me tips and ideas on how to make it beter! Hopefully there wont be too much psychology in it, but i wrote this for myself and for my revision, but my friend thought i ought to share it with all the other potterheads out there, and so there may be a little too much in there...but it's not all information and so hopefully everyone can still enjoy it!
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