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6 Reviews Found

Review #1, by Moonyxluna Dark Blue

12th May 2012:
Nikki I saw this on your page and immediately got the greatest flashback. I haven't heard Jacks Mannequin in AGES! Seriously, I immediately started mumbling the lyrics in the summary and could not for the life of me figure out who it was by.

ANND, It's Hermione and George, which you know I love.

Seriously dear, you need to go right now and delete what your authors note says about this being rubbish. Because it's wonderful. I think you did such a fantastic job of catching George's feelings about losing Fred. You didn't rush him through the healing process; it was good to see him cry things out.

When he finally was able to talk I loved the conversation with Hermione. She finally got him to smile! Even if it was only for a minute and he immediately felt awful about it; at least it was something! And yay for not making Ron the bad guy! That's one thing that kind of annoys me in some Hermione/GorF stories that they take the same route as the dramiones with making Ron out to be this drinker/abuser that he isn't. So I, as I keep repeating, I loved it :)

I don't know if you plan on going back and editing, but just make sure from that little part where Hermione is explaining the music, up to the end, that each time a new person talks you put the dialogue into a new paragraph ;)

I loved how you sort of left the end up to the readers imagination. Like.. well I'm just going to say it was George because I love them together but you know? She didn't actually give him an answer. It was cute and thought provoking :)

I really don't read all that many songfics but I'm glad I checked this out! It was very enjoyable :)

Author's Response: Haha I'm glad you liked it!

Wow, I'm surprised you thought I did a good job catching George's feelings, because I didn't really know how to write it, seeing as I've never ever even got close to the grief he'd have to be feeling ;( I try not to write depressing stuff haha.

I know, I get really annoyed with all those stories where Hermione isn't with Ron because he did something like cheat on her or something, I mean, whats wrong with them just realizing they're not right for each other? I'd never be able to write Ron doing something horrible to Hermione.

Yeah, I really should go back and edit it, I didn't before posting it :/ Thanks for the tips though dear! :)

I'm glad you liked the ending :) I really don't know whether I should say about who it was, so I won't, I don't want to ruin it for anyone else, but I'd love to tell you about what I had planned for this story, and all about who the dude was, because I did have some plans for this story haha :) Do you have an account on The Dark Arts? We could always have a chat on there :)

I usually don't read too many songfics either, that song just happened to be stuck in my head so I thought I'd try it ;) And I love Coldplay, and thought that song would fit in nice. It was originally two chapters, but I put them together, seeing as it wasn't very long.

Anywho, I'm glad you found it enjoyable! I'm glad you checked it out too, I love your reviews, and you're writing! :)
~Nikki


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Review #2, by Owlpost68 Dark Blue

10th May 2012:
Well I didn't think it was rubbish. I thought it was pretty realistic, I've always thought Hermione and George would understand each other a little more since they've both been through so much, I think you did an excellent job of conveying that by just her presence helping him little by little :)
Great job!

Author's Response: Why thank you! It's good to hear, glad you liked it! :)
~Nicole


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Review #3, by CissyLu Dark Blue

5th May 2012:
It wasnt rubbish at all. I loved the way hermione talked to George it was so sweet. Great choice of music I love nirvana. Truly a lovely story.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! :) Glad you liked it.
~Nikki


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Review #4, by NaomiMiller Dark Blue

27th April 2012:
It wasn't rubbish, I completely loved it! As a fellow writer I know that we have the tendency towards a rather masochistic way of thinking when it comes to our own writing sometimes, but this was excellent. I also know both the songs used and they fit very well with the storyline. Well done.

Author's Response: Well thank you! I'm glad you liked it. I'm also glad you thought the songs fit with the story line, they're just songs I like, and I thought they kind of went so I put 'em in. I really appriciate the review, it made my day :)
~Nikki


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Review #5, by Karen Dark Blue

26th April 2012:
I do like this, maybe you should make a second part, i mean they arent together yet that's a bit sad ;s owh well you can choose ;)

Author's Response: Haha thanks :) Yeah I might work on a second part to this after I finish my other story...we'll just have to see :) Glad you liked it,
~Nicole


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Review #6, by potterheadforever23 Dark Blue

22nd April 2012:
i love it! i cried a lot! its amazing writing

Author's Response: Aww really? Wow, thank you! I wasn't expecting that! Haha its just something I wrote one day when I was really bored :) Wow thank you! I'm glad you liked it.
~Nikki


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