Reading Reviews for Three Strikes
7 Reviews Found

Review #1, by HarrietHopkirk PART I

13th January 2013:
Hellooo! Itís HarrietHopkirk from the forums, finally hear to judge and review your entry for my challenge. Iím so sorry for it taking so long - the summer proved extremely hectic, what with work and exams and uni preparation and holidays and my questionable memory. But Iím so please that Iím here, Iím really enjoying reading everyoneís entries.

This is definitely interesting! This is the only entry that tells the story in present tense, and it definitely lends a different type of atmosphere - Iím not quite sure how, but it does, like everythingís a bit more threatening because itís happening now!

Darkness makes everything better Ė easier. It hides the colour of blood, red and vibrant, and just appears as a thick black mass. If you don't look for too long it could be water, and at a glance it could just blend into the pavement and appear to be nothing at all. Light's clever like that; it holds the key to perception and trickery and it makes you see things you wished you'd never have to.
-- I really like this description!!

And I really enjoyed Ted and Victoire's conversation and am really curious about who attacked her and the murders and everything! One thing I couldn't help but notice was how similar it is to a Muggle crime show! Is there anyway the procedures and dialogue could be... wizarded up a bit?

Overall I really enjoyed this... very dark, quite scary and so full of film noir tropes it is awesome! Thank you so much for entering my challenge!

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Review #2, by padmoonyfoot7 PART III

27th June 2012:
I love your story, though I'm rather confused.
Who ends up dying at the end? Teddy or Victoire?
I know it's a stupid question, I'm probably just not reading it right :D Also why did they want Teddy?
Just curious.
Really love this story, because it's not as if it's fully associated with magic, they only use it if necessary.
Monroe is great and I love the way Teddy thinks.
Keep up the good work!!

padmoonyfoot7: over and out!!

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Review #3, by Crescent Moon  PART III

21st May 2012:
You can't leave it like that?! It's so mean! Cliffhanger much? XD
I loved this chapter, it's so well written. I feel as if I'm reading a published book, it's that good. You're an amazing writer.
I really can't wait to see what happens next, who got shot (if anybody)? Please update as soon as you can :D

Author's Response: Aw, thank you so much - you're far too kind!

I'm wondering whether or not to actually write another chapter, or whether I should just leave it as a three-chaptered short story with a cliff hanger, but I don't think I fleshed out the other chapters well enough to leave it at that.

I think I'm going to leave it as a WIP until my exams are over, and then I'll contemplating writing the next chapter. ;)

Thank you so much for you lovely support, Crescent Moon - it's so appreciated.


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Review #4, by Crescent Moon  PART II

19th May 2012:
Love this story!!
I'm a huge fan of murder mysteries so I really can't wait to see where you take this.
Please update as soon as you can.

Author's Response: :D Thank you so much.

The final chapter should be updated in the next day or so. I had a lot of second thoughts about the final chapter, but I really just wanted to finish it and see where it took me.

It was good to have a go at something different for a change. :)

Thank you for your comments! :D xxx

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Review #5, by padmoonyfoot7 PART II

28th April 2012:
very brilliant! love the ending and Teddy and Victoire's relationship is cute and charming (pardon my cheeziness!).
I really enjoy reading this story and would love to read more.
Keep up the good work!!

padmoonyfoot7: over and out!!

Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much!

I had to think: how can I make them sound like they've been friends for years, without actions or having them seem like they're in a more intimate relationship? so I'm happy you enjoyed that.

I'm finishing PART III off now, so that should be up in a few days.

Thank you ever so much for reading, and I'm glad you enjoyed it! :D You've made my day.

Bethan. xxx

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Review #6, by unbalanced PART II

25th April 2012:
I've got to say that I absolutely love your story! The intrigue and mystery in it are just amazing, and the characterizations have been done beautifully!

The only thing I can think to point out is in your line "I didnít saw the three very frequently, but when I did I had nothing but good impressions.' " The saw should be see.

Other than that though, it was an amazing job and I'll be looking out for the next chapter!

Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much! I've really enjoyed writing this - Teddy's such a comically dark character and the mystery & the murders are a really interesting storyline to follow.

Oooh, thank you for that error! I try and scour my writing as much as possible, so thanks ever so much for pointing that out. I might get some CIs done for this story when it's finished so I'll correct that then.

Thank you a thousand times for your lovely comments!

Bethan. xxx

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Review #7, by Snoopyy PART I

22nd April 2012:
Hello, Snoopy for a review swap here :)

This was very, very interessting to say the least. Your style of writing is most interessting of all. They way you have written this begs the reader to continue reading through the story. I'm not fimilar with the genre of Film Noir myself, but you sounded like you got it spot on.

The tense was also quite interessting to read, I have never seen something quite like it. I think you made this story brillient and I an tast sucess and lots of review coming your way. (Not like their from me or anything...)

There were also no grammatical errors so that is anothr good thing about this story. In fact, I don't have anything bad to point out so an amazing job all round I must say.

All the best with your writing

Snoopy x

Author's Response: Thank you!

I'm really glad you found it interesting - I hope it was in a good way!

Because it was a murder-mystery, I wanted to make the reader feel like they were really *there*, and present tense seemed like a good and a new thing for me to try out. I'm glad I pulled it off with some success!

Thanks ever so much, and I'm pleased you liked it and couldn't find a fault!

All the best with you, too,

Bethan. xxx

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