God, I can’t believe this story has no reviews yet! I was completely gripped reading this.
I felt so bad for Molly, especially when she fainted in the entrance hall! What a horrible place for David to break up with her. And they’ve been together since third year, too?! What year is Molly in this? (It was sort of funny when Molly thought he was going to propose though, and I was half expecting her to blurt out an ‘I do!’ and just embarrass herself further, but ah well. :P).
I really like the fact that this is written in third person. Most next-gen humours are first person and really hyper but you’ve got a nice balance between the funny parts (hitting on the floor, anyone? I love the way you characterised Lucy here ;D) while still maintaining a high standard of writing. The chapter flowed really well and left me desperate to know more! I can see from the summary that it’s a possible Molly/Scorpius and that’s quite an unusual pairing and I really want to read about all the relationships between characters – especially Molly and Lucy, that seemed interesting.
Basically, this was brill. An amazing first chapter.
I think you should keep on with this! I’d definitely read more :)
-Annon ♥Author's Response: Annon!! I can't believe you've just left all these nice reviews for me all of a sudden. I'm left here to wonder what could have possibly spurred you to write such nice things for me. Love you muchly ♥
Since this is my focus story right now, I'll reply to this review first. Completely gripped reading this? :O DON'T GIVE ME FALSE HOPE, WOMAN. Haha, you may feel bad for Molly now, but you might not later. ;) I was hoping that the hint at OWLs would show that Molly was a fifth year...maybe I need to make it more obvious? But I like my subtleties :P I guess the proposing thing might make people think she's in 7th year, but Molly has a VERY overactive imagination.
I love Lucy, too! I think so far she is definitely my favorite character because she has spunk, but Scorpius hasn't even come into the picture yet, so he might claim my heart in the end. I'm in the midst of writing the second chapter right now, so I'm really taking your comments into account here LOL. I definitely will pay more attention to developing the relationship between Molly and Lucy.
I'm so happy that you liked this chapter so much! I'll try to post the second chapter soon :) Thank you so much for this helpful review, and I'll try to reply to the other lovely ones you left as soon as possible, too! ♥ Report Review
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