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Review #1, by SereneChaos Fury & Accismus

18th July 2013:
Eep! Your Helga and Salazar have so much chemistry together! I love it! I'm not sure I can place my thumb on it, but I feel like this chapter was even more satisfying than the first. Possibly because it had multiple scenes in it? I think the two scenes in this chapter were spot on and the way the two interact with each other is so natural. I'm jealous of how easy you make it look, haha!

My favorite part in this chapter was how Helga was the one teasing Salazar when they were in the forest--it's refreshing seeing someone write a side of Helga that is more than sweetness. I actually have no criticism for you here, just keep doing what you're doing! These scenes are a perfect length and I like how each one could easily be a stand-alone in the big picture. Please keep this story going--I would love to see what happens next!

Author's Response: Thank you for your reviews! They really made me smile! :) I will definitely keep writing, I just need to remember to update on here. :P

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Review #2, by SereneChaos Outburst

18th July 2013:
What a lovely start! I love the way you were able to show us the Founders' personalities in the way they responded to Helga's outburst--all of them seemed so in character with the way we picture in the books.

My criticism for this piece so far is mostly technical. There are grammatical errors (tenses and things here and there) that could be fixed. They're distracting from the story, which is why I'd suggest a quick read-over before posting.

I think also that I would have liked a little more action and a little less direct description of the founders' personalities. You did a fantastic job describing them by means of how they reacted to Helga--it seems almost unnecessary to then explain afterwards that Godric was brave and Rowena was smart.

I liked how you ended the story with the note that a lot of Helga's work helped Salazar with his own work--it seems like a brilliant piece of foreshadowing. Keep up the good work!

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Review #3, by magnolia_magic Fury & Accismus

20th June 2013:
Hi! So I guess I should start out by saying that Helgazar is one of my favorite pairings ever, and I'm so thrilled to find an author who enjoys them as much as I do :). I think you're doing a fantastic job with this collection so far!

I liked your first chapter, but this one is definitely my favorite of the two. I love that you mention Salazar's conflicting feelings about Helga; he's not sure if he finds her amusing or completely irritating. But there's definitely something about her that he's drawn to, and I think you show that well in both sections. I also love the fact that you wrote from Salazar's point of view. You did a great job with him! I always find him really challenging to write as a narrator, so I have to applaud you for your awesome work :)

I'll be adding this to my favorites! Keep up the good work...I would love to read more!

--Maggie

Author's Response: Thank you for reading and reviewing! I'm pleased there are more Helga/Salazar fans out there. :)

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Review #4, by ArtyBird Outburst

27th December 2012:
Good start you got there !!! Keep it up: this sounds like a really cool idea !! Only problem I can find is that the chapter is too short, but who am I to talk ? Anyways, I will definately keep my eyes peeled for any new updates...*wink*

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