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Review #1, by Ravenclaw_Charm Family

6th May 2012:
This is really sweet :) I just wish it was longer so you could've given us more of a back story! Ah, well...it was great nevertheless. I like how it was Next-Gen, but you used OCs to tell the story. And I wish I had HP dreams! Lucky... But it's very cool that this is inspired by a dream.

I wasn't surprised when they kissed, and I really enjoyed Cassie's strong character. I love reading about girls making the first move - Women Empowerment for the win! ;) I'm having a love-hate relationship with Zach/Cassie, though. On one hand, they should be together because they've been close friends for such a long time. But on the other hand, what about James?! And it's killing me how I don't know how he died!

Anyway, I love your characterizations. James III is totes adorbs. Zach seems like a sweetheart, and Cassie, like I said, is a strong female character (yay!). The large gaps between paragraphs was a little annoying, though, so you should fix that. And more descriptions, please? I can't exactly picture where they are :P (Maybe more back story, please??)

All in all, great job! :D

Author's Response: I think the lack of certain types of back story is part of the feel of this kind of narrative. You are supposed to imagine how James died for yourself. That will change the entire dymnamic for you personally and it might be completely different from how someone else sees it.

I loved writing Cassie for this and I'm glad you liked reading her. Yes! Female empowerment all the way! Zach is a good character to put with Cassie because elements of their characters clash and make them a good pair together. James III is my fave too! I think his somewhat intense demeanor is because he has had to go through so much for being such a little guy.

The paragraph gap thing frustrates me too! The stupid uploader thing doesn't like me so at first it decided to make the entire thing bold and I couldn't turn it back, then it did the giant spaces thing. I was too impatient to get the story out by then so I just left most of the spaces. Maybe I'll have the patience to change the spaces now.

Thanks for the feedback about the background info. I think it's better for the story for me to leave out some of the characterization background info, but the setting plays an important part of the story so I definitely want you to be able to envision that. I'll try to add more descriptions of place.

Thanks so much for leaving such a long and thoughtful review!


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Review #2, by slytherinchica08 Family

5th May 2012:
This is one of the first Oc/Oc stories that I have read and it was so sweet but yet held the sad element to it with James' passing. I love the idea behind this story as well two friends still getting over the other friends death and being able to help each other in the end. You can't help but feel so bad for them when you realize what they are going through but then you also can't help but feel happy for them when the get together in the end. I liked the characterization and how they still hold James in their memory highly but that they are finally going to be able to move on together. I felt bad for Zach in that the girl he had gotten pregnant decided not to stick around but was glad that his friends were willing to help him out. I really enjoyed this oneshot it was cute! Great Job!

~Slytherinchica08~
Recenseo 2012

Author's Response: Thank you so much! This review made me smile like a giddy little girl. I had a lot of fun writing this. I think it always makes a better story when there's an unpredictable element to it like James's death. I'm happy you enjoyed it. :)

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Review #3, by CypressQueen Family

29th April 2012:
Hi. Your banner caught my eye fir this story. I really enjoyed reading it!', however I was a bit unsure as to who Zach was. Other than that, I really like reading it.
CypressQueen

Author's Response: Thanks a lot for taking time to review! I'm glad you liked it. Zach, Cassie and James were best friends at Hogwarts.

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Review #4, by Miss Muggle Family

29th April 2012:
This is well written. I like how you portrayed the friends taking comfort in each other. This is a very interesting, unique story!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! It means a lot to me that you reviewed. I'm glad you liked it :)

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Review #5, by Hedwig_forever Family

29th April 2012:
I liked this fic.but I think Cassie and Zach betrayed James by getting together. I think it's easier as a reader to automatically assume the worst without the facts surrounding James' death a good fic though :)

Author's Response: I knew it was kind of controversial and I think Zach is supposed to still be a little wary of the relationship. I imagined James getting killed by a dark wizard because he worked as an Auror, but that is supposed to be up to the reader to imagine.

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