This was so sad! I loved that there was no dialogue in it, like it was just a stream of consciousness, a stream of George's thoughts on his brother.
The bit with the beds near the end really got to me, how he wouldn't let his mum take the spare bed out, and how he slept in it sometimes, just to feel close to him. How without Fred, he just feel vulnerable, like he has lost a limb if anything.
This was really great and I loved reading it! What I like about your stories so far is that every one is different. I can't wait to read the rest! :)Author's Response: I am a strong believer that people hide a lot of emotions and feelings when they speak, but thoughts are the trueness which is why I love them so much! You can find out so much about a person that you didn't know before and it lets you see a whole new side to them you had never thought of before!
Though I've never known anything like this in RL, I have heard about people doing that, just to have something physical to hold onto.
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I'm literally crying here amy! I'm having an angst overload through all this!
The repetiitons at the beginning were just amazing with the whole 'my last chance' and it made me feel like I was in George's thought's looking through.
After Fred died many people portray him in different ways but I like this. I like how he wants to keep Fred's memory alive by keeping his bed there to remember the good times but I also kind of like how he can't face the shop because he's right, it was the thing that brought them closer together.
The final paragraph though, I couldn't keep my tears away. George said Fred would have liked the church and whilst that might be true, it is heartbreaking because whilst he may have liked the church, would he really have liked the funeral?Author's Response: Aww, I'm sorry I made you cry!!
I am a strong believer that Fred and George's relationship was more than just pranking. They had spent so long together that it was one of the closet bonds between siblings. When you spend so much time with someone, you notice the gap left so much more and so many things bring back memories. Even something as simple as the bed.
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Oh, sad story. Poor George... *Still refuses to believe Fred is dead*
This was really beautifully written, I agree about dialogue-less writing with stories like this. It seems so much better to know what a character is truly thinking or feeling rather than just what is being said.
Sam.Author's Response: SAM! I refuse too! It nearly killed me writing this. It was like I was trying to convince myself he was gone, whilst just pretending I was making it all up!
Thank you so much!! I love dialogue-less things. It makes things so much easier ;) I love getting inside people's heads and discovering their true thoughts and feelings :)
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Hello, Amy! I told you I'd be paying your stories a visit didn't I? Well, here I am now anyway...whether you like it or not and I'll be back here in the next few days. :ninja:
Anyway, this was so beautiful. There were just so many emotions going through my mind as I read this. Sadness. Grief. Anger. Confusion. There were just too many, some I can't even describe.
You had George so beautifully written without dialogues. I don't think he could've spoken to anyone about all of this. Losing a twin, is definitely sadness in another level. His thoughts were captured SO well, and I could just so imagine him thinking all of this.
This is so beautifully heart-wrenching, I know I should've never read it because all I'll do is cry silently while typing this review :( But I did anyway, and I don't regret one single tear! It was so worth it! Write more, Amy! MORRRE!
Recenseo 2012Author's Response: Hey!! You did :D
Aww, thank you so much!! I always love writing emotions. They are so deep and you can explore things that you wouldn't normally see a character do and somehow make it sound right! I'm so glad I managed to do that!
I'm sorry I made you cry!! But as long as it was good crying! I will write more *salutes* ...soon
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this was really good , wow! amazing writing and without dialogue is SOO much better for this one-shot!! well done :)Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! :D I do love writing without dialogue :D It makes things so much easier :P Report Review
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